Really nice vocab, but the lines seemed stretched to me.

Because being poetically pathetic claiming they aided and abetted now hip-hop is diabetic
Who got the anesthetic I’ve been on to get it monotone is synthetic keeping the sugar imbedded
^An example

But my fav lines were:

Of today’s intoxication with sedation of the threat of wax evasion
since they killed crowd participation It’s been only precipitation

Overall nice piece keep it up..

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