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Old 05-23-05, 04:13 PM   #1
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Spoken Word is Bond vs. Stanza vs. ~*Khatharsis*~

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Topic: Repressed Fate
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Old 05-23-05, 09:20 PM   #2
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Old 05-24-05, 04:52 PM   #3
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checkin..in.in.in.in.in.i.n.n.n.i..n.i.n.i.n...... ...
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Old 05-24-05, 08:54 PM   #4
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check chek.....innnnnnnnnnn
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Old 05-26-05, 11:28 AM   #5
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..:: Repressed Fate ::..

This Is My Destiny Something Im Bound To In Life
I Have no ther choice these Restraints contian The light
Containing The Light of Hope and The light of Faith
The Restraint Left Me Hopeless.......Thats Repressed Fate
The Repressed fate Is Hendering My Life to end
These Barriers are So Confusing So Where Do I begin
Repression is the Hender of The natural expression
The Natural Henderence of The Original Obsession
Unattainable or Unacceptable Desires are even Repressed
Impulses of Fate Knocking at the door leaves me stressed
Preventing My Fate is not what I wanted out of this deal
I wanted to be set free after my time was up .........Until
This Stress Came upon my mind that left me in so much Confusion
So Much hate and so much Agression Left my Mind in Illusions
Illusions that I was Free When I wasnt..... My fate didnt Come to past
That made me Take actions against these Barriers That Held Fast
So I Brought This upon myself as I Think about The Things I done
To find reason Or shall I say Fault......Then I Pulled out My Gun
This is It im Tired of the Demented thoughts running Through my Head
So I Put The Gun where The thoughts Came and This is what I said
Repressed Fate ...No Longer can You Hold me Down from My Destiny
Then I Pulled the Trigger .................and Let The Steel Set Me Free

Goodluck To you Both
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Old 05-26-05, 07:39 PM   #6
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i didnt know how to go about this so this is what i came up with. it's mainly a story line on Repressed fate.

The courthouse room was overflowed that early day in May.
The people came from miles around and traveled night and day
With hatred burning in the breasts, they drove with scarcely any rest
To see the boy who broke the law and now would have to pay.

It wasn't that his act of crime had sounded so displeasin'
For blowing up a power plant appeared to have no reason
And, in another time or place, it would have been a 'curious' case
But, being in a war-time state, 'twas called an act of treason.

The Daily News had spread the rage and called the boy a spy
And all the world was startled at the popular outcry
That stretched from Oregon to Maine. A wounded nation called in pain
That, for his act of sabotage, the guilty boy must die.

The room was tense and quiet as each witness testified
Against the youthful figure with no lawyer by his side.
If he'd shown sorrow he just might have found a friendly face that night
But he showed nothing and whatever chance he held had died.

As the trial neared to a close the judge said, "Stand, my son.
We find it very hard to understand what you have done.
Unless you have an explanation for this cruel act against our nation,
If you would like a chance to speak, then take your final one."

"Hard to understand?", the boy spoke with a voice of hate.
"If you are here to sentence me that you're a little late!
My sentencing has long been done by God and every mother's son,
I've been condemned before, your Honor, by the hand of Fate."

His words invited insults from an audience unkind
Who, left unchecked, would probably have grabbed him from behind
Until the sad truth hit their eyes and they began to realize
As he addressed the jury that their saboteur was blind.

"They call me un-American", he smiled. "A cruel fame
For one who fought in foreign lands to save his country's name.
While serving in the infantry, I traded sight for victory -
How many of the people here would stand and do the same?"

"When I returned from overseas I didn't plan to see
A Broadway Avenue parade in honor just for me
But just a chance to start again within the ranks of normal men
A new beginning in the land that I had helped keep free."

"But every avenue I chose led to a closing door
My handicap was viewed by others like an open sore.
Instead of opportunity, a grateful nation handed me
A welfare check stuck in my hand and food stamps for the store.

"Now quick the land forgets the hand that helped to plant the seed!
Are we to be disgraced because we fought when there was need?
Or did our strength show other men the weaknesses they have within,7
Remind them that they.owe a debt to patriots like me?"

"I felt I should return the honor to my fellow men
"And let them have a first-hand look at what my gift had been.
Late one night I pulled the spark that put the city in the dark
And made them see what I can see - for that I am condemned."

A pin dropped would have echoed in there like a cannon's roar
As pairs of feet were shuffling and eyes stared at the floor
For each man knew he had been named and each felt burdened by the shame
And each man feared the Maker he would have to stand before.

The jury didn't leave the room. "Not Guilty!"was their cry.
The foreman said, "I will not hang a better man than I."
The gallery, threatened with removal, sounded out their strong approval
And, possibly, a teardrop fell from that young soldier's eye.

The judge stood up and smiled at him amid the cries and cheers
He said, "Young man, you have been found not guilty by your peers."
And, after thinking hard and long, his judgement came out loud and strong -
He set the young boy free and gave Society thirty years!
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Old 05-26-05, 07:41 PM   #7
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good luck to you guys also.
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Old 05-30-05, 04:05 PM   #8
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I'm just going to assume Bond isn't showing up...

vote/Khatharis

Stanza: Nice drop here, had some good emotion to it and a storyline that didn't sway, however its an overused concept. I did like how your last lines of where he is about to commit suicide were all written with the last word on the next line...it was cool. You got skills

Khatharis: Damn man, that was tight. Usually with pieces that long I lose focus in the middle, but this gripped me man. Emotion and imagery was great, could really feel this guy's pain for what the people did to him. Vocab was simple, but it didn't need to be any better. Just a dope piece man
 
Old 05-31-05, 11:51 AM   #9
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Khatharis wins. .
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