Da Needle In Da Haystack Thang U Bite, I Saw It In Anotha Verse When I Wuz Reading Thru Battlez, U Changed Sumthan' Lyke 3 Words

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sas don't man i killed you here, ur structure was a joke, needle in a haystack line is played as hell, ebay lines are just plain wack......

lets just see how it finshes up ey?

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Ur ‘expressionless’, drawin blanks like tracin ya ‘face’
Ya mum only gave birth cos you were wastin her space

Mum lines? Wack

New to these surroundings, adjusting like blind babies
Shit when it comes to voting your even behind ladies

This would of worked 100 years ago

Hope to fuck your reading this cos seeing is believing
Give sas a piece of his own, but im preferable 2 bleedin

Ok attempt didnt connect though

challenge me? Damn! You must be opposed to victory
Infact its quite intelligent, now you’ll go down in history

Down in history? WACK+PLAYED

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Prem's left cluthing at a broken future, & searching for inspirations attack.
Having said that, ya like a injecting farmer lookin for a needle inna haystack.

Wack

Ya inferior Prem, ya texting attributes are jus worthless.
& I kno P forsaw the L, so if my fate is merking you, jus watch me serve my purpose.

Wack

Don't try and fight it Prem, don't make ya demise delayed.
Cuz ya doom will be delivered...
Like you ordered the game from ebay!*


No too basic

I'll uppercut ya chin & knock out ya tooth.
Cuz I be callin the shots..
Like the sniper outta "Phone Booth"!..**

Npo punch

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Voted For: Premanition

Ur ‘expressionless’, drawin blanks like tracin ya ‘face’
Ya mum only gave birth cos you were wastin her space
5...nah!! it started well but the 2nd line was kinda basic and more of a filler punch than anything creative.
New to these surroundings, adjusting like blind babies
Shit when it comes to voting your even behind ladies
5...again, its lacking the usual creativity you bring like in the punchline league, just seems like ya not tryin.
Hope to fuck your reading this cos seeing is believing
Give sas a piece of his own, but im preferable 2 bleedin
6...aight, this was a better line from ya, the 2nd line was kinda funny but i do think you could've made it better.
challenge me? Damn! You must be opposed to victory
Infact its quite intelligent, now you’ll go down in history
4...nah, not feelin this....the whole concept is fuckin played and again you delivered it too basic-like.

OVERALL: 20/40


Prem's left cluthing at a broken future, & searching for inspirations attack.
Having said that, ya like a injecting farmer lookin for a needle inna haystack.
4...played concept...needle idea is just a new approach at a "drug" line, but the whole haystack idea has also been used before, just not that way.
Ya inferior Prem, ya texting attributes are jus worthless.
& I kno P forsaw the L, so if my fate is merking you, jus watch me serve my purpose.
4...nah!! this is borderline on self-glorifying, ya tryin to make it not seem that way, but the whole concept is played again.
Don't try and fight it Prem, don't make ya demise delayed.
Cuz ya doom will be delivered...
Like you ordered the game from ebay!*
5...i get the punch, but you didnt use the doom concept that well and the whole ebay thing just didnt seem to come off as hard hittin.
I'll uppercut ya chin & knock out ya tooth.
Cuz I be callin the shots..
Like the sniper outta "Phone Booth"!..**
5...again, punch not delivered right, the setup was filler and didnt connect with the punch, and the whole concept whilst kinda original was too basic in its delivery.

OVERALL: 18/40


overall this was a weak battle
i mean prem is known for his creative wordplay in the punches but didnt seem to deliver, he just came too basic really with only one decent punch. saskilla had a weird structure, especially at the end when everything changed to real short lines, it flowed well, had some good ideas for punches at the end but they were not delivered as good as they could be, also had some played concepts to begin with.

V/ - Premanition

return the favour!! link to my CALI battle is in my sig
and be sure to leave some decent feedback cuz shit keeps getting removed by strobe in that battle!!!!

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Voted For: Premanition

Prem got this......

Prem
1. not a bad opener.. not amazing.. but not bad 7/10
2. hahaha dope line... 8/10
3. not bad.. 7/10
4. not bad closer.... its aight.. 6/10

Sask
1. wack.. im sorry... 3/10
2. not feelin it.. im sorry.. structure horrid too 4/10
3. no.. not feelin this either.. 3/10
4. not liking it... 4/10
Your structure is horrid im sorry.. wtf....

PREM GOT THIS.. he is better then SASk easily

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Voted For: Premanition

I thought SAS was gonna take this at first, he had nice wordplay and good punches, just lacked multis and any decent hard hitting personals. Prem your lucky to get this win, coz in my opinion you came weak!

But still for harder hitting punches and less played concepts....

V/ Prem.

NO HATE

RTF in sig in 3 days or this vote gets dq'ed!!

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