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06-24-05, 12:28 PM
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Unwanted Pain
IP: 775C 64E4
Unwanted pain It’s all dark in my mind… I’m stuck in my own mental box The horrible reality I must face comes in waves of electric shocks I feel like I am staring Lucifer himself strait in the eye Looking right at my demise… leaving my spirit broken inside As this needle goes deeper… I feel the poison invade the vein I try to stop… I fight in vain… I fall below hell where the angels are slain The ground is soaked and bloodied by a million pains I might as well let my self go… cuz I feel it spiritually taking over me This darkness is now my reality… like time; it will kill me inevitably I try to throw it all away, but the death always come back I get put it in a cell, but my inner darkness will always find a crack I throw my kit across the floor hoping to escape But it’s evil starts to take shape; not a place on earth I feel safe With a thrust, my throat swallows the blade… my breath fades The twisted petty life I lived slowly starts to decay I can feel the deaths grip on my soul get even stronger I just wish I could have fought the pain…just a little bit longer
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06-24-05, 12:37 PM
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IP: 775C 64E4
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06-24-05, 12:50 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: A91E 2744
Nice piece right here, very vivid imagery that portrayed a strong sense of emotion. The flow was definitely there, some multis here and there. Vocab was on point, structure made it nice to follow. Insightful lines filled with pure feelings, like how story developed. Ending was dope too.
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06-24-05, 02:10 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: 964F D870
^^^she said it all fam...nice shit right here...loved tha way you MADE tha reader see what u was sayin...hot shit right here fam
return tha fav in either a battle or OM...links in sig
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06-24-05, 09:11 PM
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IP: 775C 64E4
uppin... id love you all if ya looked at this.... thax
and yes, ill return the favor on OMs
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06-24-05, 10:31 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 4CF5 65A7
This was a nice verse.Beautiful vocabulary.Nice metas.Flow was good throughout the whole verse.
Wat else can I say....one of the best verses I seen in OM. 100/100 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=196731 |
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06-24-05, 11:40 PM
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Witness, 4 God, 4-Ever
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IP: 164A E25C
this was good, good concept....imagery was decent, structure was good....the flow was easy to follow, overall nice drop, keep it up
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06-25-05, 12:06 AM
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Light Weight
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IP: 0DB3 4A20
Scary good. Gonna tell you that was hot man.
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06-26-05, 08:37 PM
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IP: 775C 64E4
uppin... i will read your OMs.... just post a link
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06-27-05, 02:51 AM
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IP: 775C 64E4
whats up with whack cats getting read but not mine? god damn it
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06-27-05, 08:49 PM
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IP: 775C 64E4
uppin fags... fucking god... you little bitches just CANT return the favors can you? fucking christ
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06-27-05, 09:30 PM
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Sam Dope
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IP: 1CA5 73AB
Iight this shit was better than expected.
Imagery was real good, emotion was excellent...This was a very solid drop man |
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06-28-05, 07:47 PM
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IP: 775C 64E4
i love you.... LEAVE LINKS AND ILL HIT YUR SHIT!! UPPIN
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