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Pair-A-Docks | 2 | 28.57% | |
nonchalant | 5 | 71.43% | |
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07-14-05, 12:24 AM | #1 |
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Pair-A-Docks vs nonchalant
IP: C7FD 2E92
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10 Lines Due 30 min. after check in Blind spit No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting ..checkin' in Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 07-17-05 at 12:24 AM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
07-14-05, 12:25 AM | #2 | |
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IP: C7FD 2E92
nonchalant has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-14-05 12:25 AM.
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07-14-05, 12:25 AM | #3 | |
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IP: BBBD 91AB
Pair-A-Docks has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-14-05 12:25 AM.
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07-14-05, 12:37 AM | #4 |
Flyweight
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IP: BBBD 91AB
Kid....how do you think you gonna win writing bad rap and stuff like that...
You look FOOLISH....got Em saying, "I ain't never seen an ASS like that"... Kid you're all clammed up...you need to at least try to get out ya shell... I would say that you might win...but kid there I really doubt you will... You think that you can rap kid.....well guess what...I don't believe you... Cause honestly...your lines are as stupid...as a line for a movie preview... You can't free-style....cept maybe wit ya clothes from the Goodwill... Dogg your punches couldn't hit me.....even if I just stood still... Don't try to throw blows my way kid.....cause ya disses I can't feel... How ya think you'll win.......when you can't elevate past an ant hill! |
07-14-05, 12:38 AM | #5 |
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IP: C7FD 2E92
Check it..i will pulverize this kid..turn his flesh into ashes
He's..runnin' out of 'shine' like a 'light bulb' that 'flashes' When he's playin 'basketball'..that's the only time he's 'runnin for the block'(reppin) It's obvious he likes thing in 'twos'..so let's give pair-a-docks a pair-of-cocks It's 'funny' how he's confident battlin' me..he's a fuckin' 'joke' Only time he fuckin' looks 'big' is if he put on two fluffy 'coats' I'm new to RV..but the new kid will still eat ya Only way he's 'toppin' me if he was 'pepperoni' and i was the 'pizza' To beat me is impossible...like bein' a <b>P</b>ussy-<b>A</b>nd<b>D</b>ick(pair-a-docks) Put this dude on a 'strawberry'..cuz i 'creamed' him and gave his ass a 'whip' (whip cream) |
07-14-05, 12:41 AM | #6 |
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IP: BBBD 91AB
ya whole verse was nice, but most self glory...good job though....uppin votes
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07-14-05, 01:26 AM | #7 | |
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IP: 0825 899A
Voted For: nonchalant
Kid....how do you think you gonna win writing bad rap and stuff like that... You look FOOLISH....got Em saying, "I ain't never seen an ASS like that".. lame..... Kid you're all clammed up...you need to at least try to get out ya shell... I would say that you might win...but kid there I really doubt you will... didn't really rhyme but first line was nice You think that you can rap kid.....well guess what...I don't believe you... Cause honestly...your lines are as stupid...as a line for a movie preview... um...ok i guess You can't free-style....cept maybe wit ya clothes from the Goodwill... Dogg your punches couldn't hit me.....even if I just stood still... ok Don't try to throw blows my way kid.....cause ya disses I can't feel... How ya think you'll win.......when you can't elevate past an ant hill! ok finisher breakdown-verse wasn't really all that hittin...punches seem like they were thrown by a drunk dude how badly they missed...but it was ok for a newbie Check it..i will pulverize this kid..turn his flesh into ashes He's..runnin' out of 'shine' like a 'light bulb' that 'flashes' nice When he's playin 'basketball'..that's the only time he's 'runnin for the block'(reppin) It's obvious he likes thing in 'twos'..so let's give pair-a-docks a pair-of-cocks ehhhh.haha It's 'funny' how he's confident battlin' me..he's a fuckin' 'joke' Only time he fuckin' looks 'big' is if he put on two fluffy 'coats' ok...could have been harder I'm new to RV..but the new kid will still eat ya Only way he's 'toppin' me if he was 'pepperoni' and i was the 'pizza' haha...ok To beat me is impossible...like bein' a Pussy-AndDick(pair-a-docks) Put this dude on a 'strawberry'..cuz i 'creamed' him and gave his ass a 'whip' Breakdown-nice verse...you got some real potential....nice punches nice play on his name too....could have used a lil more complexity to spice it up but your verse overal was pretty goood
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07-14-05, 09:02 AM | #8 |
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IP: C7FD 2E92
uppin' for votes...
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07-14-05, 09:22 AM | #9 |
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IP: E388 EB8A
Voted For: Pair-A-Docks
good verse...flow,wordplay an rhyme scheme keep it up
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07-14-05, 12:41 PM | #10 |
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IP: C7FD 2E92
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07-14-05, 01:14 PM | #11 | |
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IP: AB26 BBA9
Voted For: nonchalant
Pair-A-Docks [u] Kid....how do you think you gonna win writing bad rap and stuff like that... You look FOOLISH....got Em saying, "I ain't never seen an ASS like that"... Rhymed that and that. Bad punch with ass like dat, decent concept though. Kid you're all clammed up...you need to at least try to get out ya shell... I would say that you might win...but kid there I really doubt you will... Forced rhyme. No punch, just saying you doubt he will win. You think that you can rap kid.....well guess what...I don't believe you... Cause honestly...your lines are as stupid...as a line for a movie preview... Bad punch honestly. Set up wasn't great either. You can't free-style....cept maybe wit ya clothes from the Goodwill... Dogg your punches couldn't hit me.....even if I just stood still... First real punch I've seen. Kinda played though. Don't try to throw blows my way kid.....cause ya disses I can't feel... How ya think you'll win.......when you can't elevate past an ant hill! Decent closer. Overall, I see the potential, but you need to work on your wording because it keeps making your punches mere statements then a personal. Similies are bad as well. I liked some of your concepts though. [u]nonchalant Check it..i will pulverize this kid..turn his flesh into ashes He's..runnin' out of 'shine' like a 'light bulb' that 'flashes' Decent punch. Bad filler though. When he's playin 'basketball'..that's the only time he's 'runnin for the block'(reppin) It's obvious he likes thing in 'twos'..so let's give pair-a-docks a pair-of-cocks Take out his name and would have flowed better. Ok punch, not that great. It's 'funny' how he's confident battlin' me..he's a fuckin' 'joke' Only time he fuckin' looks 'big' is if he put on two fluffy 'coats' No. Bad punch. I'm new to RV..but the new kid will still eat ya Only way he's 'toppin' me if he was 'pepperoni' and i was the 'pizza' Dissed yourself a bit here. To beat me is impossible...like bein' a Pussy-AndDick Put this dude on a 'strawberry'..cuz i 'creamed' him and gave his ass a 'whip' No. Bad punch again. Decent wordplay. Overall the potential is here as well, but you need to work on your wording and punches. They are weak, and every now and then you have a filler. I liked some of your punches. My vote goes to nonchalant for punches. His wordplay helped a little, but his punches hit harder in my opinion. v-nonchalant
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07-14-05, 01:15 PM | #12 | |
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IP: AB26 BBA9
Damn it, the structure messed up. Do you all care?
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07-14-05, 04:37 PM | #13 | |
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IP: B376 58AD
Voted For: Pair-A-Docks
Check it..i will pulverize this kid..turn his flesh into ashes He's..runnin' out of 'shine' like a 'light bulb' that 'flashes' aight When he's playin 'basketball'..that's the only time he's 'runnin for the block'(reppin) It's obvious he likes thing in 'twos'..so let's give pair-a-docks a pair-of-cocks nice It's 'funny' how he's confident battlin' me..he's a fuckin' 'joke' Only time he fuckin' looks 'big' is if he put on two fluffy 'coats' played I'm new to RV..but the new kid will still eat ya Only way he's 'toppin' me if he was 'pepperoni' and i was the 'pizza' weak To beat me is impossible...like bein' a Pussy-AndDick(pair-a-docks) Put this dude on a 'strawberry'..cuz i 'creamed' him and gave his ass a 'whip' (whip cream) played but ok 5/10 Kid....how do you think you gonna win writing bad rap and stuff like that... You look FOOLISH....got Em saying, "I ain't never seen an ASS like that"... weak Kid you're all clammed up...you need to at least try to get out ya shell... I would say that you might win...but kid there I really doubt you will... weak You think that you can rap kid.....well guess what...I don't believe you... Cause honestly...your lines are as stupid...as a line for a movie preview... ok You can't free-style....cept maybe wit ya clothes from the Goodwill... Dogg your punches couldn't hit me.....even if I just stood still... nice! Don't try to throw blows my way kid.....cause ya disses I can't feel... How ya think you'll win.......when you can't elevate past an ant hill! nice 6/10 it was a preety weak battle but i like pair-a-docks verse better and he had better structure wich won my voe cause it was a close battle R/F or the vote will be removed http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=199762 |
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07-14-05, 05:05 PM | #14 |
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IP: C7FD 2E92
uppin' for votes
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07-14-05, 06:53 PM | #15 |
Flyweight
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IP: BBBD 91AB
good battle^^^^^ uppin
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