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07-18-05, 08:15 PM
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QU3 M! D3$T!NO 3$ M! UN!CO 3N3M!GO
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Shadow That Follows Me
IP: 00A2 4ED0
Shadow That Follows Me
*Me* It’s a rainy day 50 degrees, and I’m sitting right in front of the TV The end of the flickering lights when I change channels I stop to see A family show…all so happy and a guy holding a baby in a way I see me So many emotions going through my head…afraid cuz I’m only thirteen All of a sudden I start to think…what went wrong, why did I do to deserve this You can say this is much more than a curse it’s not like I worked to earn this For every action there’s a cause involved and I was the one to be put upon it My action…was that I forgot to pull back like a glock unclocked I busted The phone rings…the lights went off…checked up on it and it said I missed a call It was my girl…she’s keeping it and there’s no way she’ll change her mind at all *The Shadow* Patiently waiting…9 months to wait…slowly time passes on by I just can’t wait Moving around I’m just so eager, so nervous, so happy just cant wait to see his face Slowly turning side to side like the discomfort if I was sleeping in spring bed But it’s just me fidgeting, so many curious things running through my head I’m poking at a red wall…trying to get out…I can’t cuz I’m yet not a man Cuz I’m waiting to be the new symbol of life as soon as I touch land It’s been 8 months and I see nature at work slowly I start to see the bigger me Wanting to one day follow his foot steps and walk in his shoes…soon this will be 1 minute and counting, all here is voices and a female now starting to scream Out through the end of what I’ve seen to be a pit, lights shines on me and I can’t see *Me* My hand on the Plexiglas looking through the nursery window Slowly I gain a smile on my cheek now thinking this isn’t so I hear a subtle gentle cry, but from whom or what is it coming from Then I see this baby, and I know it’s from what is my newborn son A tear flows down my cheek into my mouth I detect the taste of salt Not no more afraid of my childhood of coming to a sudden halt My heart pounding of joy, now I’m waiting to hold him in my bare hands Cuz I’m a raise him right so he can be a better man than I am Now I’m so happy to hold something that at first I didn’t want to see Teach him many thing as if he was the shadow that follows me links: http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2303565 http://community.rapverse.com/showp...568&postcount=9 Last edited by Symbol : 07-31-05 at 07:43 PM. |
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07-18-05, 08:36 PM
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
Drop your link or ima close this
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The Competition
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07-18-05, 08:43 PM
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QU3 M! D3$T!NO 3$ M! UN!CO 3N3M!GO
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IP: 00A2 4ED0
there both links.
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07-19-05, 12:01 AM
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Witness, 4 God, 4-Ever
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IP: 22E0 3445
yeah man this was good, emotion and imagery were the best things i saw, vocab was ok, liked the flow, keep it up man
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 i come from a time when you earned respect, for your rhyme and the way you made words connect, not the money that you made or the girls you sexed, a concept you obviously haven't heard of yet Mars Ill
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07-19-05, 01:43 AM
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IP: 00A2 4ED0
thnx lol you can nominate this if you want lo......
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07-19-05, 06:43 PM
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QU3 M! D3$T!NO 3$ M! UN!CO 3N3M!GO
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IP: 00A2 4ED0
this shit is dope check this OM out...
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07-19-05, 06:51 PM
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-BTR-
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IP: 2029 97B3
i liked the flow of this..everything ran smoothly but got kinda weird at times..i like the creativity u put into this..good idea..
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07-19-05, 09:11 PM
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IP: 00A2 4ED0
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07-20-05, 01:05 AM
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QU3 M! D3$T!NO 3$ M! UN!CO 3N3M!GO
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IP: 00A2 4ED0
uppin for some feed
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07-20-05, 09:47 PM
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IP: 00A2 4ED0
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07-20-05, 10:01 PM
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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IP: F9F0 389B
Yeah this was hot I like reading OM's like this cause it makes me think and alot of peeps don't do shit like this but this is hot 9/10 rtf on "How Its Going Down" Thanxx
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07-20-05, 11:55 PM
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QU3 M! D3$T!NO 3$ M! UN!CO 3N3M!GO
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IP: 00A2 4ED0
thnx...uppin for some more feed.
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07-22-05, 04:14 PM
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IP: 00A2 4ED0
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07-22-05, 08:07 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: D681 2E32
i love thee drop they inspire me to keep on writing no matter what
good shit!!
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