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Old 07-21-05, 05:50 PM   #1
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The Waters Reflections

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The Waters Reflections

In These Waters I Think I See
Another Dead Nigga Lookin At me
Maybe In These Waters I See
A Life That Useless From Weed

In These Waters Lies A Poor Reflection
Of a Man Thats Tired of 5-0 Detections
In These Waters Lies Just Another Face
Of a Man Thats Lost In Life and in Place

In The Waters Reflection My Troubles Rest
or shall I say my Worries At There Best
Worries of Dying from a Bullet To The Chest
Livin Life In The Present Full Of Regrets

In These Waters I Know That I Saw
a Young Man Thats Runnin From The Law

In These Waters Lie The pain And tears
But In The Waters I Wish to See....A Young Man who Lives Who he Is


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Old 07-21-05, 05:55 PM   #2
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Old 07-21-05, 06:24 PM   #3
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Damn Stanza didn't know you could get that deep it was hot liked the structure vocab was tight this was hot 8.5/10
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Old 07-21-05, 07:00 PM   #4
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LOl Yeah man I Like doin This

thanx

Still uppin for feed
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Old 07-22-05, 06:20 PM   #6
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Thanx Man .....................Still Uppin
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Old 07-22-05, 08:06 PM   #7
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i felt this was a deep drop lots n lots of imagery
gooshit!!
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Yo prophecy you did your thing hommie i give it a 10/10
because i actually read the whole thing,,an you got nice punches
an the word play doing big things too,,,,
yo i cant hate on you,,,,,nice drop 1


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Damn yo that shit was ruff it was captivating
good story telling skills keep it up
that shit was a 10/10
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Old 07-23-05, 12:31 AM   #8
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this was good, really felt it, but it sounded more like a poem to me, but thats just me, overall good read, keep it up
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Old 07-25-05, 11:18 AM   #9
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Thank you All for the feed Lets keep it goin ..........
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Old 07-25-05, 12:01 PM   #10
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Damn, thats mo like a poem lol, nice work... liked the emotions

a classic one...

lol "A Life That Useless From Weed" haha... nice
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Old 07-25-05, 12:19 PM   #11
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It was decent...

Vocab lacked, emotion was there, but you could've put a little more into it. It just wasn't as deep as I was expecting it to be. Imagery, however, was pretty good, so props on that.

Overall, a solid piece

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Old 07-25-05, 12:33 PM   #12
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yeah, nice concept, emotion was there, the imagery was hot. nice drop!
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