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07-30-05, 10:00 AM
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IP: 828D 0B7A
Thanks for the good feed, ima return now.
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07-30-05, 11:25 AM
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IP: 7A05 0210
Good stuff Daubs. Good flow and structure.
.'This isnt about power, its deeper, the ultimate test.. ..With one final praer i tie my gloves and hope for the best' That was the best line, it was the killer punch after you had built up the tension. |
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08-02-05, 08:32 PM
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IP: 828D 0B7A
safe^
up...............
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08-02-05, 09:33 PM
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IP: CF74 5D3A
Aw Naw Again Some Dream Ass Poetry You Didn't Get Grimy Hell Put This In A Story Book Not Rap At All You Wrote This For Poetry Heads And Again Fuck Poetry No True Atitude In That Shit
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08-02-05, 09:42 PM
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Its not poetry you herb, its a tpical..the topic was fight night.
I can do grimey shit too, check some battles / om's.
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08-03-05, 07:22 AM
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IP: FFBA C081
this was a nice drop
good wordplay had kind of an ol school structure that seems 2 be everyones begining structure but this was str8 drop 7/10
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08-03-05, 09:48 AM
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IP: 8A05 210E
yea i agree w/ tha majority on diz 1 overall it was a great piece fa sho i like ur imagery, structure, multi'z & tha concept ...but da missing link in it was ur vocab u need work on dat but othawise ur good keep writing & elevating
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08-06-05, 07:56 PM
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IP: 023E B69D
safe...........
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08-09-05, 01:06 AM
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yo man nice drop i like the nice imagery, good multis and such...vocab wass iight could up on that.....nice sttructure, made it flow nice....8/10 man keep postin and shit
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08-09-05, 07:30 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
good drop....imagery was crazy......flow was nice...vocab was aight.....structure was really good....emotion was high in this drop........good ending 2.....rtf...any link in ma sig
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08-10-05, 08:20 AM
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IP: 828D 0B7A
ima return them 2 later.
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08-10-05, 09:51 AM
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IP: 3240 794D
This was a good piece that held descriptive content...great vocab & good flowing multis..The imagery was solid, which made ya complexity good & realistic..seeing how boxers fight so they kids can eat..as in this case..The idea was creative as well & held a mediocre depth toward the entire piece..
The only thing I didn't like is that you didn't elaborate on the topic..it's seems more like a good story that doesn't finish..I feel it would've been better if it was extended..but overall it was a nice piece..keep doing what you do |
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