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IP: C294 D0F2
I’m one kinda bitch from southside and fallen
Imma gonna give you this while u sit there squallin Your tears, fallin like acid, imma make ya burn a hole around ya so u can fall through it, Rippin ya ego to shreds, ya mind going, ya brain dead. Ya soul leavin ya body, betta start prayin now, facin judgement day is how. Low on the income, high on the horse, don’t know where I came from, which route I took course. Gotta interject and pull all ya rejects outta my crib, cuz this lil girl is nothin u wanna mess with. Leavin ya helpless in ya time of need, cuz you sit there and watched ME bleed. What’s that now, apologizing, wow, you need to just keep walking cuz you never were balking. Keep trashin and bashin me here fo real, I’ll really get down and on ur level you feel? my link:http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203164
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this peice needs alot of work...
i liked some of the rhymes but they need to be structured better.. i mean this peice's flow was all over the place.. couldnt find a good flow.. kept gettin thrown off you could be a good emcee no doubt jus work on the following... 1. make each line end at the same point this helps with your flow alot.. 2. pick a topic.. and stick to it 3. as you progress in ya structure you can add larger vocabulary and get into some multis and metas but for now stick to structure return tha favor my dude.. http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203072
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crhyme sindicate . . . . . Last edited by Tha Sick One : 08-06-05 at 12:35 AM. Reason: typos |
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IP: C294 D0F2
thanks ya'll for da feed, i'll work on it, work in progress.
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this was pretty good, flow was kinda hard to follow, not one of your best, sorry, keep it up
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![]() i come from a time when you earned respect, for your rhyme and the way you made words connect, not the money that you made or the girls you sexed, a concept you obviously haven't heard of yet Mars Ill
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IP: 28AD 5545
yo man i wish i could give you feed i really do...but sick one perfectly laid it out accomplish those 3 things and u will be solid iight man....keep elevatin and postin ya know do ya thing man but in the mean time rtf on my sig links
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IP: 4686 AB07
dude, 2 fast is a girl, in fact my girl, lol
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