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RawFlowz has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-20-05 06:19 AM.

Kwar N. Teen has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-20-05 06:19 AM.

he hasn't behaved cool, so check this bastard be maimed through.
inhabits a lame crew, now i'm gon 'chop raw' like 'Cassidy claims to'..
fried n smothered, flow's smooth - talkin bout my rhymes be butter.
so i'll 'change my name to fag' so ours could both describe eachother!
guts spill wit gun's purr, with boring lines ya put me still into slumber.
killin the dumb sir, n i'll 'end raw with heat' like 'grills in the summer'..
beat em with plurals, see ya boo's a carnivore, so i put meat in ya girl.
and you got no 'game'..
that's why ya couldn't 'get on my level' w/ all the 'cheats in the world'..

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Voted For: Kwar N. Teen

Kwar N. Teen

he hasn't behaved cool, so check this bastard be maimed through.
inhabits a lame crew, now i'm gon 'chop raw' like 'Cassidy claims to'..
2.. If this had been worded in to a punch.. this could have been dope.
fried n smothered, flow's smooth - talkin bout my rhymes be butter.
so i'll 'change my name to fag' so ours could both describe eachother!
4.. Ehh.. Decent..
guts spill wit gun's purr, with boring lines ya put me still into slumber.
killin the dumb sir, n i'll 'end raw with heat' like 'grills in the summer'..
1.. Self glorification isn't too cool..
beat em with plurals, see ya boo's a carnivore, so i put meat in ya girl.
and you got no 'game'..
that's why ya couldn't 'get on my level' w/ all the 'cheats in the world'..
3.. Self glorification.. but I don't know.. I thought this was still decent..

Overall - 10

RawFlowz

Flow diseased, fool please, you so wack it's detestable
All this nigga spits is dribble, like kiddies in special schools
0.. Played.. Wack.. Whatever..
Supposedly you ill, but there's an eclipse of a doubt
This nigga be barkin garbage while he foamin at the mout'
1.. If you would have worded this right, there was a very long shot that could have been good..
Naive, believin himself to be ill this, ignorance makin him blissfull
Your flow's abysmal, nigga end it now, mayn here's a pistol
0.. Played like no other.. Wasn't even a punch..
You're no match, like a pocket knife fuckin with a meat cleaver
More output of shit than Mr Hanky coughin up from a fever
2.. Concept had potential.. you bombed it though..
You show no sense like choosin a name you know your ass can't spell
Ain't a thing though, who needs brains to get a job at Taco Bell?
4.. If he has a job at Taco Bell then this is pretty good.. if he doesn't then this is just fucking garbage.

Overall - 7

Vote - Kwar N. Teen

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Nice verse Souljah...

70% of Kwar N. Teen's verse was played as shit...

You have potential, but you need to realize that there is much more to battling then multies.

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Voted For: RawFlowz

Wow........raw flowz definately got this, much better punches kaw almost had this definately a good battle but overall this goes 2 raw flowz

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Voted For: RawFlowz

Kwar N. Teen[u]
he hasn't behaved cool, so check this bastard be maimed through.
inhabits a lame crew, now i'm gon 'chop raw' like 'Cassidy claims to'..
I'm gonna line with a bad set up.
fried n smothered, flow's smooth - talkin bout my rhymes be butter.
so i'll 'change my name to fag' so ours could both describe eachother!
Eh, can be taken as you are dissing yourself.
guts spill wit gun's purr, with boring lines ya put me still into slumber.
killin the dumb sir, n i'll 'end raw with heat' like 'grills in the summer'..
Finally a attempt at a punch, wordplay was blah.
beat em with plurals, see ya boo's a carnivore, so i put meat in ya girl.
and you got no 'game'..
that's why ya couldn't 'get on my level' w/ all the 'cheats in the world'..
Punch was blah. Seen it before, and horrible set up.

Overall you need to work on your set ups. They ruin your punches, and are just fillers most of the time. Take advantage of every line you get.

[u]RawFlowz
Flow diseased, fool please, you so wack it's detestable
All this nigga spits is dribble, like kiddies in special schools
Haha, not that great of a punch, but I laughed for some reason.
Supposedly you ill, but there's an eclipse of a doubt
This nigga be barkin garbage while he foamin at the mout'
Bad set up and bad punch.
Naive, believin himself to be ill this, ignorance makin him blissfull
Your flow's abysmal, nigga end it now, mayn here's a pistol
His flow never ends, isn't that a good thing?
You're no match, like a pocket knife fuckin with a meat cleaver
More output of shit than Mr Hanky coughin up from a fever
No creativity and again a bad set up line.
You show no sense like choosin a name you know your ass can't spell
Ain't a thing though, who needs brains to get a job at Taco Bell?
Taco bell was random. No real punch.

Overall, like Kwar you need to work on set up lines and making harder hitting punches. Include wordplay as well.

Vote goes to Raw for more consistant punches and harder hitting. Both need to work on set up lines though.

v- RawFlowz

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Voted For: Kwar N. Teen

yo.......ur shyt is dope bro....i like the way ur punchlines hit him...and the other cat didnt have a good set up...
u got some nice shyt....v/ kwar

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o.......and can i get rtf on my battle............werd

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