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09-01-05, 12:53 AM | #1 | ||||||
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The Bloody Truth
IP: CF74 5D3A
Lets face it whack fucks will erase it but my wisdom is bright
And the damn system is white so its all right hell I have to fight Respect damn its whack and pathetic how blacks don’t get credit Stale face and shook to read pale face books yet they say energetic Hell I don’t get it how they feel we lost if they’re not boss political Turns critical description and decision is like Egyptian religion pivotal They want to Pharoah us and slave the brave thank god for Abe White boys treat me like toys wind me up and I walk and talk and behave Slavery was a white faggot act a maggot attack on black decent folks Arrived in tribes yet survived after whip lash nowadays hear frequent jokes HA! HA! They’ve slip a lot got the evils writing HIP HOP And that’s my art wonder will that be stolen also? Behind a slip knot Many of us was hung just so they can claim our fame and inventions I flow alert but they go berserk calling me whack, lame dimensions For me, my conduct beseems a corrupt scene on the streets Because I was abused and used as a slave for white mankind defeats The purpose of democracy hell I am not free Last edited by MADDRAPPER : 09-01-05 at 01:12 AM. |
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09-01-05, 01:05 AM | #2 | |||||||
Better THAN You!
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IP: 42C3 2EB8
Was Pretty Nice..flowed well in my eyes...the Multi's were present in general..but nothing really made me just go WOW...but still a few lines were like..think about it..my favorite lines are these..
Respect damn its whack and pathetic how blacks don’t get credit Stale face and shook to read pale face books yet they say energetic Hell I don’t get it how they feel we lost if they’re not boss political Turns critical description and decision is like Egyptian religion pivotal ^ that stuck out to me..specially the last 2 bars ...those were like..hmm dude has a bit of knowledge..so yea...overall.. 7.6/10 the only thing i see that could be worked on is wording and take out a few filler words....besides that its pretty nice.. |
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09-01-05, 01:36 AM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 0825 899A
This was an ok drop, the flow was good, you can up on your vocab though, your structure was good, even though the concept was kid of played you got to the point and made it your own, good drop
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09-01-05, 06:36 PM | #4 | ||||
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
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09-01-05, 06:40 PM | #5 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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IP: F8A3 00F5
This was good had good flow and everything but the concept was played out nah mean?...But good drop though word up..
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09-01-05, 07:39 PM | #6 | ||||
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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IP: ABAF E236
blah good flow and good multis but as far as rhymes they were all played you coem pretty played most of the time so work on creativity u need to just suprise us and do something original so this peice wasnt that great i do think youre better than u generally get credit for though
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09-01-05, 11:31 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
played out mean you're heard the rhymes before nothing played out about this post maybe forgotten but not played out and the never used yall feel me?
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09-01-05, 11:35 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
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