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Old 10-17-05, 11:25 PM   #1
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Vendetta Ft. S-large - So Long

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This is the 2nd track on my demo for Island Def Jam (IDJ)...they came across some of the music that some of my boys be sending to labels and shit and they e-mailed me asking for a demo...so I did one so here's a deep track...it's me on the 1st verse and 3rd verse...S-large on the hook and 2nd verse...enjoy


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Old 10-18-05, 01:38 PM   #2
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Old 10-18-05, 05:50 PM   #3
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Old 10-18-05, 06:44 PM   #4
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alright peepin now...that beats ehh..sooo n so.....it aint the greatest thing i ever heard.....your flows pretty good....the lyrics are pretty damn good..i'm feeling that...your delivery and presense was good....very appealing debit......the only thing thats throwing it off is that beat.......your flow is good with it tho dont get me wrong....soo it aint bad..........overall 7.8/10


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Old 10-19-05, 07:07 PM   #5
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Old 10-19-05, 10:08 PM   #6
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word..listened to this last night...

flow was good as usual...but the beat man....gotta lose it....its horrid....

delivery was there....and overall this is a well rounded track i must say....but the beat just kills it all....
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Old 10-19-05, 11:46 PM   #7
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Old 10-20-05, 02:20 AM   #8
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wow...i came back not trying to hop into any beef and the fucking hamburgler struts in talking shit...i ain't got time for u fat boy...i'm in talks with Island Def Jam...only reason i'm back here is to post tracks i've been doing and to pass time so suck a dick...be gone and find a real job that doesn't require u to wear an apron and touch meat all day ...though we all know u love touching meat...uppin for more feedback
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Old 10-20-05, 03:40 PM   #9
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I agree with people on the beat, it's not really my thing...the mellowness suits the song though but you could've used a better one. Flow was on point for this type of track, not too slow, not too fast but just right to pour the right emotion into it. Lyrics are good, idea of chorus was good but should've get a girl or so to sing it...would've had more effect I think. Second guy was good as well, you both have sort of the same style, it's a good combination in fact. Lyrics are deep, and it's a topic everyone can relate to. Chorus just kinda throws me off together with beat you know. But the verses were good, delivery was good, nice presence...

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Old 10-22-05, 03:29 PM   #10
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Old 10-22-05, 11:45 PM   #11
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see...I'd listen to 5 seconds of this beat on S/C then turn it off...not feelin it

the keyboard sounds amateurish


1st cat sounds decent...kinda stiff on the mic


hook is confusing...are u talking or singing


2nd verse...rather bland...lyrics are personal...but the delivery is dull


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Old 10-23-05, 04:26 PM   #12
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Old 10-24-05, 11:57 PM   #13
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Old 10-25-05, 01:01 AM   #14
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Listening...

Hate the beat haha...flow is tight, lyrics are dope...delivery is good...nothing bad to say at all about this track really...other than the fucking beat.

But overall, good shit. Congrats on the Dej Jam shit !

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Old 10-25-05, 01:11 AM   #15
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although the beat is kinda suspect its still an overall nice song..glad to hear that IDJ contacted you thats some dope shit ..you and S large making dope songs together.continue doing it. ya flow was never the less like always the gully-est shit lol fa real...u know im feelin the swag u got on the beat..S large did his thing with the hook but infact it could have been a lil better thought out . ne who sorry took me so long to really peep it..good shit tho uppin
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