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11-14-05, 11:28 AM
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Real Hip Hop
IP: CF74 5D3A
Real Hip Hop
A disgraced situation how you face castration ready to Neuter your computer better hire a tutor and steady crew If I remove your nuts you’ll groove as a hardcore slut bury this jerk and his literary work and just ignore your butt wear bling rapping and cause things to happen best cling to napkins they dries eyes while you cries and tries to sing with dim nouns I swim around like large aquatic carnivorous mammals some ridiculous animals such as whales I touch mass trails study botanicals your foul creations barks like Dalmatians in parks you piss on trees but you can’t twist these lyrics best grab a pooper scooper your sprees corrupt your verse style flaws so great best to donate to a worthwhile cause your rhymes suck so sign up for Burger King talk to Santa Claus my rhymes thermal but I remain in blind terminals with bus tickets plus wicked thoughts, hell the coach approaches late there’s a trick wit This had a fat desire but it had a flat tire before its arrival had to postponed My drip and now my dome trip can never leave the hood I’m most known For traveling and unraveling remote roads hot and bold but got Potholes in my plans above the rim but as a thug condemned to hot Damnation because I slam a nation with vicious lyrics and suspicious Spirits, wear fine ice after a decline in price economics foul can Screw with Ebonics styles so I’m window shopping awhile understand? |
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11-14-05, 03:37 PM
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IP: C9B9 62DD
Whatt up duke? First of all, this was a pretty nice piece though, I can see you love playin' with vocab and multis..Shit is always good to play with to make a drop hotter A disgraced situation how you face castration ready to Neuter your computer better hire a tutor and steady crew If I remove your nuts you’ll groove as a hardcore slut bury this jerk and his literary work and just ignore your butt ^^^^^^The beginning lines and the second lines I liked because it showed flow, vocab and multis skills at its finest.. Now, the problem is, most of the lines in this peice were too long or they didn't make relations to the topic u posted. Well to me it didnt anyways.. Some got off topic for instance your rhymes suck so sign up for Burger King talk to Santa Claus ^^^^^Umm okay? No sense what so ever.. some ridiculous animals such as whales I touch mass trails study botanicals ^^^^Liked what was said, but it was too long.. Overall, this was a nice drop fa sure, but in my opinion try to shorten down your lines and make sure u stay on topic unless its like a keystyle or suttin' keep doin' u HoFFa |
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11-14-05, 03:47 PM
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IP: AEE8 69E1
maddrapper, is that you?!?!?!
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11-15-05, 11:54 AM
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IP: CF74 5D3A
Call_it_Murder01 thanks fo rthe props and critique for real bro
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11-15-05, 02:41 PM
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IP: 56B7 42C6
a lot of it didnt make any sense but this aint bad...
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11-15-05, 03:51 PM
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IP: CF74 5D3A
M.C. Streak every bit of that made sense thwe problem is you didn't read the damn thing
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11-15-05, 09:02 PM
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IP: 56B7 42C6
call it murder summed it up nicely that santa claus and burger king thing for example anyway your just mad because i just criticized your verse.
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11-15-05, 11:38 PM
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IP: CF74 5D3A
well hell its different between criticizing and straight up lying homey just tell me what didn't make sense up in here up in here
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11-16-05, 12:17 AM
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IP: 5285 DC82
want to battle gladbag?
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11-16-05, 11:49 AM
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IP: CF74 5D3A
stuff is off the hook respond yall for real
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