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"...Once a Legend , Always a Legend..."


General Lazarus onced stroll through villages gallantly..
even the mightest warriors at the time couldnt be,half as he..
An honorable man who many respected and feared..
but few were envious, who couldn't wait to see the General's blood smear..
General Lazarus had indestructible weapons which he wielded left and right..
Gifted with the eye of the beholder,no enemies ever left his sight..
Casted magical powers that formed Fungal Diseases on his adversary's Chest..
and weaves through the bones to devour the internal organs as the corpse layed and rest..
Carried Japanese Knives that were crafted in the lava of Olympus Mons..
Hurled them as he wished,until his enemies' scowling visage was gone..
Picked up a megalith from the Stonehenge and heaved it 100 feet in the Open Sky..
Landed and dropped on the opposing Army..BAM!! few thousands of soldier's souls just died..
Flexed his muscular strength any way he wanted too but still remained humble..
Favored by the Gods and Kings which believed that Lazarus' legacy will never go down and crumble..
but the impossible became possible and the great General disappeared without a trace..
the great city of Rome had fallen afterwards,and many more fatal events would soon come and had to be faced..


...Years later, the city of Rome had been destroyed and the great generals of the Legions had vanished..though signs of General Lazarus have been spotted..and it has been rumored that the great General will soon come back and lead our mother city to victory against the Carthaginians....

Tumulius Caesar,friend of Lazarus,is now the Caesar and writes to his dear friend trying to persuade him to lead the Legions that he onced led with great leadership....

Dear Friend,
Lazarus,Son of the mighty King Rulious, a favor is what i ask for...
i beg for your sword to once again be drawned in this time of war..
The Carthaginians are on our tail,pillaging our villages in the outskirts of the city..
brutally murdering our women and children carelessy and not giving them pitty..
Blood has been shed,swords have been drawned,sheilds have been battered..
our Holy City falling into pieces,these reasons motivating you? or do they even matter???...
Can you once again rise to the occasion and defend the people that made YOU..
knowing that these same people are dying defendlessy is making me angry and hopefuly your in a rage too...
OR has the Gods themselves put you in a shack and cursed your legacy in silence..
but I,Tumulius,strongly believe that you have not changed,and you will return and lead the Legions to safety OR violence...


Days had passed and sign of General Lazarus has yet to be spotted..Tumulius is in his tent,creating tactics and strategies just before the Carthaginians launch their attack...just when things were becoming very difficult for Tumulius and Rome,a large shadow appeared in the entrance of Tumulius' tent..


Tumulius:Can't Be......















To Be Continued....

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man,Well...this was a different peice.
As a rap standpoint...it's bad.Your vocab and flow and everything was off..
BUT..from a poetic standpoint..it was dope.
Your vocab and way you put your lines together sounded like you were on some Homer,or shakespeare shit.
But,aside from all that...it was pretty good.Nice,compelling storyline and shit..

Keep at it.

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yah man i was trying to stay away from your ordinary text piece nahmean...thanks and i appreciate the feed

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