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the piece had an abstract flow
had ill content and imagery was illy at the beginnin the dividin in sections was coo Equipped with firearms to destroy intruders, unable to be seen Cloaking ability offered as a tribute to my life being swept clean Armor implanted over my flesh, so battlewounds wont do damage Nitrious Oxidide presented, fastly moving w/out crashing..ill manage Peripheral Vision annointed site seeing will elevate my kill count Predicting a world take over, body pile ups deserted in big mounts ^sick vocab, and nice content thewhole piece kept my attention i think u coulda threw a more complex rhyme scheme and still managed to get ur point across.....i no how it is to use an abstract flow...u can pack more concentration on content that way and u did it well, i think just a tad more rhyme scheme woulda helped the read go more fluidly, yet still hold the content keep the pen writing `1 |
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