Well This REALLY IS MY FIRST SONG...i recorded "I Could Die Tonight" right after this one...so yea...this is like an introductory song for me...here go tha link: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=2422504

here go tha lyrics:

Verse 1: (Memphis)

No need for introductions,niggaz know who I am/
Memph finest muthafucka,yea I know I'm tha man/
I'll crush ya life in my hand,And leave you right where you stand/
Takin bitches from they niggaz cuz I'm nice with my hands/

And not to mention tha mic,if I get caught in tha hype/
Yea...I'm takin that life,cuz tha money make tha world go round/
But niggaz try and hold me down/
Cuz they dont wanna see my wrist frozen now/

Yea..but fuck yall...you aint talkin nothin but noise/
I'd rather play with ya girl..than to play with them toys/
And lyrically...I'll molest all ya lil fuckin boys/
And Babies alike...HA HA!!....im crazy right?/

Chorus: (Ghostwriter)

We dem boyz on a mission/
We aint stoppin til we rich and/
On Tha top,see us glisten/
Now we shinnin and you bitchin

Verse 2 : Memphis

Im on top of my game and you aint knockin me off/
You make pillows feel like rocks DAMN!..why you so soft?/
Life is like a tred mill wit niggaz runnin in place/
But that bitch gone stop when this gun in ya face/

Im a hustla...i can turn a bun to cake/
Superman in tha booth,yall can cause me no harm/
You got skittles on ya neck while im rockin lucky charms/
And we aint gonna speak about that shit thas on my arm/

Imma call my nigga up and he gone bring them gunz/
I know i aint a gangsta,i aint claimin to be/
But you betta have AOL if you Aimin at me/
Cuz Ill flip on you niggaz like im changin beat/

Life is like a dice game and we playin for keeps/
And when i come around,you niggaz betta have my money/
This aint comic view,you dont want me actin funny/
Look man...im blastin dummies

chorus 2x

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"Do I Have to be 'Shade' wit tha '45' for you to take me 'Sirius' (serious)" -------Memphis

Once again,seems like you half assed the hook,and put no thought into it..
I liked the lyrics in this song a LITTLE more than the other one.But still,you sound mainstream with your lryics...Like,this track is something I could hear cam'ron or juelz santana spitting on the radio.And if your a fan of that kinda shit,well..then it's good for you..But In my opinion,I hate that..
I think maybe you should switch up ya flow or something..

So..yea..decent track..better than the other one....
And for your 1st song,this is really good.
`1

playing.
intro... ok.
flow is good. beat is ok.

content is very generic, nothing making me think "wow this guy is dope' more made me think, wow this sounds like a million other emcee's out there.


quality is good [/jealous] hook is again generic. with the quality and production you obviously have, you shoudl be laying tracks alot betetr than this.

This is good, for generic mainstream bro. get original.

peace

-Y's-

im startin to think...maybe i should have waitin until i recorded somethin new before i put up my audio...eh...next time i'll know

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"Do I Have to be 'Shade' wit tha '45' for you to take me 'Sirius' (serious)" -------Memphis

These are some good feeds. Memphis the key thing I would work on is Lyrics. The quality is there and so is the voice. The delivary is there also. I just think lyrical content could make you stray away from the rest. Also look for producers that don't have the same sound. Sometimes when you have a producer that sounds the same the Mc tends to sound like the rest. I am going to continue to keep an ear out for you homie. Peace and all that good stuff.