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Old 01-01-06, 08:23 PM   #1
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hmmm....quality could b better i guess, the first dude fell off beat sometimes
the chours was very dry and off beat...
the seconed on kid seemed to be the brains of the song but punches made no real sense....off beat a lil

hmm maybe im to critical or not a nice guy but work harder n u will get better

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Old 01-02-06, 04:50 PM   #2
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First Verse - Flow was solid. Lyrics could be upped tho.. i thought they were mad simple and bubble gummish.. except not so happy lol.. flow is solid tho... but lyrics i would definatly work on.. i would recommend actually writing your lyrics down while listening ot the beat on paper.. and then with the music off thinkf of lines to go in your verse, and then just fit em to the beat..

chorus - flow was off at the beggining.. then it setteled in..

second verse - flow was different ,, was a off snare completely.. maybe thats why i liked it.. i hate the snare.. im land my line where i want tolol.. thats how i feel.. but flow could have been a lil better..

overall not a terrible track.. but could use some touchin up..
not bad fellas.. keep droppin
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