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02-19-06, 10:45 AM | #1 | |||
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Day And Night
IP: 5A28 5A7B
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?p=2663135&posted=1#post2663135
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2663136 Hmmz Night & day.. The struggle to get through his feelings exhausted him, she left, but the feeling remained as in a phantom limb All this sunshine in his life was , a devotion to his pride? but the counter glow was being replaced by a rainstorm, Trickled him to a 'wreck' that kept him hidden beneath his core.. He decided to take a walk... As he was walking, to this valley, the sun went slowly down.. he saw this mountain expandin valleys with even clouds he couldn’t count, walked toward to the highest peek saw nothing but this glimmer A mirror of hope found his shining frown above this snowless winter… Turns tired, so he sits.. As he sat there thinking, on how to make things change.. warm breaths of wind came over his skin and silence was arranged Then the moon lit horizons & the sun just turned away.. and inside he starts to realize, me trying just pushed her way… As the night fell, closing his eyes he made a wish.. He opened his eyes in psychological states, broke free of memory to figure his fate Saw some glory and wondered why she went away Nocturnal activities on arrival when darkness swarmed his way Struggles were tightened the dark was digging his hearts grave He held his grip in pure spirit hit the floor his strength gave way If there was a hope…….Darkness.. The devastation of ultimate doom was apocalyptic looked like it was over, a done deal as life’s entities transcripted.. SO strong to light the masses with an ecliptic visual sentence a pale light seeped with curtains of mist consuming the earths moon yet words remained absorbed & stuck in his throat with wisdom & truth.. he had stumbled by this will-o'-the-wisp beneath his innate roots.. Conclusion.. Did he finally find the key to open just a gap to pandora's box & will the equator be in balance with results of equinox? I dont know..maybe wishes come true |
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02-19-06, 10:47 AM | #2 | |||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5A28 5A7B
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02-21-06, 09:02 AM | #3 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 0080 CDEC
nice joint fosho yo... flow was tite.. imagery was cooo
the structure you used gave it a poetic essence... emotion ran deep thru this piece nice works stay1 |
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02-21-06, 07:39 PM | #4 | |||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5A28 5A7B
thanx upping.................
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02-22-06, 01:53 PM | #5 | |||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5A28 5A7B
upping this thayng
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02-22-06, 02:51 PM | #6 | ||||
I Chill in Asylums
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IP: 9133 A552
Nice piece man, the flow and imagery were great, the vocab was good too. Like vortex said the structure made it have a poetic look and feel to it, which was nice. A lot of emotion in this, good job man, keep it up. Please rtf on anything in my sig, thanks. Peace.
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02-22-06, 03:31 PM | #7 | |||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5A28 5A7B
thnx............
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02-24-06, 07:54 PM | #8 | |||||
Bonecrushing Nigga
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IP: AFA6 AF1A
I could've sworn I read this in a site somewhere............
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Guess who?... ...Paramik Fuckin'...
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02-25-06, 02:09 AM | #9 | ||||
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IP: 31C2 62EB
^Word up ... *searches*
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The Competition
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02-25-06, 02:17 AM | #10 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
kids been banned for cheating, so he obviously bit it.
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02-26-06, 12:20 PM | #11 | |||
Just searching.
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IP: 8262 49AE
He voted for himself on RV awards.
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