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Old 05-01-06, 11:06 PM   #1
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Oh Puppy

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Puppy don't go, puppy don't go-go
I remember I use to walk you like a yo-yo
I love you like licorious sticks and bubble gum sandwhiches.
You use to play in the sand and yell at them sandbitches.
So puppy dont go, puppy dont go.
I wanna lick you like a yo-yo.

[Hook]
Yo, they call me the nick-nack cuz I give a patty-whack.
Im the nick-nack, cuz I be feeling on dogs on their sack.
They dont know jack, cuz they think im Jack.
I eat dogs like a damn shack-attack.
Eat em like a big-mac.
Cuz i gotta big sack
No not like a sack of balls
Not like a sack of golf balls, walls, something thats tall.
I like to go to the mall and make out with a barbie doll.
Ya thas all, cuz im going down the street with Paul Wall.
I ate his grill and now he looks like Paula Abdul.
She aint cool she just a fool who drinks my puppies drool.

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Puppy don't go, puppy don't go-go
I remember I use to walk you like a yo-yo
I love you like licorious sticks and bubble gum sandwhiches.
You use to play in the sand and yell at them sandbitches.
So puppy dont go, puppy dont go.
I wanna lick you like a yo-yo.

[Hook 2]
I need you Puppy Dog
I will feed you Puppy Chow
I love the way you use to say Bow-Wow
Not the faggit rapper who cant rap with shit
Im talking about the dog who has only 1 tit.
Its small, so I tried to pop it cuz i thought it was a zit.
I squeezed it so hard, puss came out of its arm-pit.
Now it started coming out of its clit.
So back up back up like a damn tractor.
I will call you like something that rhymes with tractor.
Your mama is like a tractor OOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!
Let it SNOOW!!!!!!!!!!!
I LIKE BIG TOES!!
GET THE FUCK OUT OF HERE BEACUASE...............

[Chorus]
Puppy don't go, puppy don't go-go
I remember I use to walk you like a yo-yo
I love you like licorious sticks and bubble gum sandwhiches.
You use to play in the sand and yell at them sandbitches.
So puppy dont go, puppy dont go.
I wanna lick you like a yo-yo.
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Old 05-02-06, 08:59 AM   #2
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Old 05-02-06, 03:43 PM   #3
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what.. the.....?
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Old 05-02-06, 09:02 PM   #4
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ok, i would love to ask wut the hell was the point of this shit...? had some good rhymes but really no meaning. unless ur expressing some things like u like touching dog sacks. and stuff. anyways. u had some good rhymes and i liked the hook but really not that good. anyways dont get discouraged cus im in a bad mood. i say fuck it and try again.

word....
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Old 05-05-06, 01:05 PM   #5
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dude....this shit is not just weird...its also crualty to animals....u need to check urself man...
talking about weird shit is not the only way to get attention for a rapsong...but I guess u do u and I do me right so Im trying not to misjudge and all but thats still weird dawg...
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Old 05-05-06, 03:29 PM   #6
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Man, this was fucking terrible. Just stop, please stop. Worst shit I ever read.
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Old 05-06-06, 07:45 AM   #8
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this piece felt really confused. at first i thought you was gonna rhyme about your childhood love for your pet dog but then i saw the line about you "licking your dog like a yo-yo" and i thought to myself what the fuck is this. you need to think of a more sensible and mature topic to base your writing on, that is where you could start. the you need to work on your rhyme schemes. and think of more sensible vocab because it seemed like a lot of the things you were saying were just being said because they rhymed, no matter how stupid it looks on your part.

elevate your topics and vocab and think before you write to avoid further embarrasment

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