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The Squander
IP: 294B 306D
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=212867
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?p=2760239&posted=1#post2760239 She was the girl of many dreams A golden smile...could make dudes twirl wit many things/ Didn't have much money but she always urled it with care Like most black women, she bore a weave, payed rent with the curls in her hair/ She was the queen of the skid... had so much ass that she had to leave up the lid Lied too much, Like plutonic blasters, she was mean with the fibs/ Loved by everyone, she bore a smile that could stun the mob Anything but a hood rat, at Crenshaw High she won the prom/ Eduction and a bright future, always voted most likely to succeed Heart of a champ, even had the will to teach a blind kid to read/ A tough women, wore a mind set of night pewter (a rock) Always made the right decisions, you could tell she had a bright future/ But it didn't go that way.... Her college life was downed with the vodka When it came to men she was always played, like a clown with a Tonka/ Then she lost all her attractive figures, after she started using drugs Couldn't ever find a nice guy so she started doing thugs/ She took part in an abusive marriage, where she learned how to grip the nine Killed a man and her life was ruined, like glued murders she sticked to crime/ She remembered her days of glory Regretted the mistakes she made, for her, the sun bore rays of worry/ Though about the decisions she made and realised wealth was a laundered right The she went back to cooking her meth, she lived a squandered life/
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IP: A52D 82FE
...feed please...
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Can u guess 2v's Gender?
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IP: 6BB6 E242
it's ok .
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IP: 2CC8 2E00
this was descent. topic was meh
flow was nice most of the time rhymes were descent... overall diss wuz descent.. |
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 4381 3163
The story was cool, it had a twist and I like that.
This was my favorite part... Eduction and a bright future, always voted most likely to succeed Heart of a champ, even had the will to teach a blind kid to read/ This was my least favorite part... She took part in an abusive marriage, where she learned how to grip the nine Killed a man and her life was ruined, like glued murders she sticked[should be stuck] to crime/ You used "sticked" to force the multi. Forced multi's = not good. Overall it was aight. Keep writin'. |
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IP: A52D 82FE
thanx for the feed everyone..upping for some more .
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 4381 3163
Quote:
why don't you go leave some feed for me...thanks |
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