im like fuck maddrapper
he aint ready
if so i eat his ass up like spahgetii
he a loser and his rhymes iz pety
run up on him and slash em wit tha machetti
u dont want beef cuz ill bury u under a sheet
wen da truck stop i shoot a buckshot
maddrapper yo flow aint hot
u need 2 stop
i got tha spot locked
im done wit u now im gonna point tha gun at u now

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tay in this bitch shoot 2 kill :shoot

dog this was too simple plain and dull nothin popped out at me practice on ur wordplay and makin ya lines flow keep droppin ya shit........


peace

Not really impressive at all........shit no point in really feeding on something so pointless you should really step your game up if you plan on diss'n anybody for any reason.....

PS:
Step Ya Game UP Seriously...

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crhyme sindicate
Open Mic Hall Of Famer

Wow......simply amazing...

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Ready to Ride...By the Way

I'm Probably Still Better than You

Lyrical Assassins

"so many mothafuckas speak without purpose
that's why most of you mothafuckas weak and out worthless
niggas you can't be deep without surface
gotta crawl before you walk but you can leap without lurches"

Knight Sir Rebral

lol.. man this was too simple.. and it seems like your just joking, well.. I hope you are.. haha

anyways wasnt feeling this honestly, was too weak for my liking and too short as well.. oh yea you need to post 2 links before a mod closes this thread man, anyways keep dropping and elevate. pz

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ok those first 4 lines ive heard in one of eminems song. 2 that is way to simple. u need to make ur lines longer instead of 4 words. ok? get some skill then drop something else......


totaly not in a good mood today....

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im so ill that cancer thinks im its father.

im like fuck maddrapper
he aint ready
if so i eat his ass up like spahgetii
^^^ To basic, no vocab, no complexity, no nothing ^^^

he a loser and his rhymes iz pety
run up on him and slash em wit tha machetti
^^^ Ok but again on the above ^^^ nothing to take note of.

u dont want beef cuz ill bury u under a sheet
wen da truck stop i shoot a buckshot
^^^ No comment ^^^ but a little pointer try and make your shit
rhyme.

maddrapper yo flow aint hot
u need 2 stop
i got tha spot locked
im done wit u now im gonna point tha gun at u now

As a whole this was rubbish, u need mad elevation, check out the help threads
if you need any pointers on how to write.