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08-24-06, 03:17 AM | #1 | ||||||
Herb
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AK47 make ya whole block num
im workin big chips yeen workin wit nun my weed make a smart nicca go dumb i kno bout nines n shiit cuse i got me one yeen bout throwin da handZ mo like bitch talkin den runnin 2 ya momma crib cuse u kno how my hood do on da low low but stil doin it googa loo u wanna battle dude ima hurt chu mo den a virgin loosen day virginty foo fuckin wit me everyone u kno n sorrow hope u go 2 heaven cuse u wont live 2 see tomorrow ull be six feet deep wit 2 shots da head n a hungry head n ya kidney homeboi i dont care how u tote ya shiit cuse i got a lot of hatas on my cock like o bitch den ya best friend thankin he want da beef put ya n saran wrap so my dog hav sumtin to eat i got a whole state ride wit me so if u want drama we can go 2 war like USA n dem iragese im down for a 187 2 mac 11s 3 full clips n a whole lot of chips yes i grip nines u shood kno bout me ima hustla ask about ask about me Last edited by J EASSY : 08-25-06 at 03:08 PM. |
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08-24-06, 08:27 AM | #2 | |||||
Black Poet
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IP: 860D ECBB
It's not bad I guess, kind of lost you on a few bits,
**Opener was ok, it flowed, not much word play or multies,. just lacking a little complexity but it will come in time** AK47 make ya whole block num im workin big chips yeen workin wit nun why i dont kno u shood ask ya son i kno bout nines n shiit cuse i got me one ***Don't know what is it, it don't rhyme or nothing***** yeen bout throwin da handZ mo like bitch talkin den runnin 2 ya momma crib *** this was good, could up vocab a little & spell word correctly no hate by the way*** cuse u kno how my hood do on da low low but stil doin it googa loo u wanna battle dude ima hurt chu mo den a virgin loosen day virginty foo Anyway this was alright, keep writing stay active and holla at me if you need any help elevating. 1~ DROP TWO LINKS !!!!! OR THIS WILL GET CLOSE *********** |
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08-24-06, 12:13 PM | #3 | |||
Dont Fuck With Me! EZ....
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IP: 9A65 4C53
u had alot of of average bars noting to complex or anything just basic flow was aight as-well, am not into that vocab shit so that was good to me but u had no real punches or noting like that if u gonna spit raw get into it dont let it brake ya head into thinking what u should put just let it flow but this was aight for u'r first drop like poet said it will come in due time an its not a hate just helping so keep droping..........
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08-24-06, 03:09 PM | #4 | ||||||
New Jack
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IP: 5227 877C
this was written like you was high when you was writing it
nigga your the type of nigga that people tell to STAY IN SCHOOl but anyway ya verse seems like it would sound better in audio at some parts but keep doing you cause their is always going to be haters but that should motivate you and listen to what the haters say cause good or bad critism should only make you better Last edited by wiley d : 08-24-06 at 03:17 PM. |
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08-25-06, 03:06 PM | #5 | ||||||
Herb
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IP: 0825 899A
much love to all ya
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