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Old 10-10-06, 01:54 PM   #1
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My, gift to speak is weak...but my pen is on point
Ghost writer master mind...put my pen on a point
Driven by my madness...Speak of what I Posess
I'll break a sword across your face
To leave your tongue in a mess...
Weak Bastards wipe... as Fiend Cowards Gripe
Like the souls of 9/11... In the Twin Tower Peaks
I have the Gutter of Mac Dre... and the Soul of Gillispie
But I smoke away my Talent
In the Home of a Century...
My past is tainted...My Future's unknown
My insight see's only Vegeance...In the Heart of the Chrome
I see Despair and anger...without a way home
Why my niggas creep
When their better to Roam...
I lead others to Believe...That my skills are supreme
Am I talking to shit...? Thats for you to believe
Don't get slumped by an 80...And face death in Degrees
And have your soul swimming free
The Emacipation of 1863
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Old 10-11-06, 05:17 PM   #2
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Old 10-14-06, 07:36 PM   #3
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this had a good flow to it but nothin' really stood out and made me say oh shit, ya know?
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Old 10-15-06, 03:27 PM   #4
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Eh? I did what I did, But thx for tha feedback anyhow
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Old 10-25-06, 12:48 PM   #5
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this was ight, but some part were not really on point patna. You had a good flow overall but maybe make your verse more creative by puttin some multies or makin ya punches wittier, ya feel me? some bars i just didnt really get at all but....

Driven by my madness...Speak of what I Posess
I'll break a sword across your face
To leave your tongue in a mess...
^^^that was my favorite bar outta the whole joint....
holla at ya boy. on my OM's peep the sig shawty...
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