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Verse 1: Paranoid
Verse 2: Revolutionary Red

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3118490
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3118489

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Listening...

Beat is decent...

Para...quality is decent. Flow starts off better, but it still sounds choppy at the end of each line. Lyrically, the track is pretty basic shit man...you can do better than that. "Wack" and "crap"? Come on man...lol. Delivery was a tad bit on the monotonous side, but getting better. Your should stray off from the underground kind of tracks for a while...you do alot of songs like these, maybe you should mix it up a bit? And I'm not talking just about emotional songs either.

Red...comes in, I like your voice. Flow starts off actually pretty good...fast, but it's smooth. The flow slowly falls off more and more though as it reaches the end of the song. Quality was a little bit muffled, but still acceptable. Lyrically nothing specail either. Delivery wise, you did well. You have potential.

Overall, decent track boys. Keep it up.

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Listenin'..

beat is hot...

Paranoid...pronounciation is a lil off but it's getting better...flow is gettin' better..but the lyrics 2/3 of the time is real nursery shit...delivery was on point tho..and emotion on the track was nice..

Red...quality is koo..I like your voice...flow is pretty nice..some bits u putting too much in...delivery is good..im liking it...it starts to lose later..the flow starts to get messy...but still keep doing it I liked it..

Nice shit..RTF to Facts n Fiction

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beat is dope or course devize made it word, your flow got way better damn, I remember first you sounded like a robot damn, you still need more emotion in your voice, lyrics are cool tho, second dude's voice is dope, nice emotion, nice flow perfect. lyrics are cool. The beat fits perfectly to the track, good drop

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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...873#post3118873

Para - quality could be upped.......need to up ya delivery.....up ya emotion man......it sounds like ur juss readin off a sheet of paper.......but ya flowin on beat......

Red - quality could be upped........flow falls off at a few places....but rides beat well none the less.....emotion and delivery better than para but still needs more work....

Overall - strate track...lyrics were nice on both verses juss up that delivery and quality ....

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thanks for the feed? but yo I fuckin yell in some of my lines if you listen. How do I need to up the emotion, do you not beleive me I'm spittin from my gut?

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beat is decent.... vox seem a lil loud to me....delivery is diff....lyrics is cool aswell i think ur verse coulda been smoother....the next dude his voice reminds me of this one dude i kno....flows decent...yea i dont like the beat....overall this cool keep doin u word

uppin, give me some feed fuck.

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returning the feed dude..sorry it took so long...u know im good for it though...

hmm vocals could be mixed down to the beat a lil better...you add reverb?..if not maybe you should try adding some and turning the vocals down just a SMALL bit...

yea your flow is DEFINITELY improving..every track u get to where your sounding more and more natural..this is your best track flow wise that ive listened to...like ive always told u...give it time and itll come...and well..its coming......

lyrically coo as well...2nd dude...flow is pretty coo...he speeds up a couple spots to catch up to the beat...but nothing TOO big..could be fixed though.....voice is pretty nice as well.....

but for real man..honestly...i think its time you save money and up the equipment..your getting to where your flow is developing and what not...delivery is coming along better....its time for the next step in making a good song..and thats quality.....invest foo....

overall it wasnt a song that i would download and bump on the regular...but definitely a song i can respect from seeing your progress...like i tell u every song...keep the shit up...it takes time...and your getting there

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