I don't even think dat dis fag boy is gonna show

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WADDUP DTH!

Booyakasha!

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Thinks hes a pimp, how he figures the shit? kid is a dick
These bitches wouldnt blow O's with cheap cigarette tricks
Hoes quick to turn U down unless the ladies bezeerk
Cuz chicks aint doing OT like they too lazy to work
U wanna go toe to toe, Im bashing this weak clown
So fucka ring....... Octagon get his ass beat now
I speak ether, while this guy be weaker
Cuz we all know Octo puss like sea creatures
Octavius'll get hurt when I make his head jerk
And remove OC so fast it'll help the network
They don't wanna see Otto show up, son you over
They only wanna see auto show up and run you over

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he wanna try the neena? get hung and dryed like ima cleaner
..slugs fry his features,Run up ya dying town,and eat watever 'lion around'..
..like some hungry hyenas! (lying/lion)

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aight,ley me key this up

pop this cat and bomb these rats/
fuk it,ima just 'shoot Ali' like recording a boxing match//
stay wit razors now,this played maids a clown/
this dude couldnt be a 'heavy wade' ... if Dwayne gained some pounds!*//
ya bitch wanna holla B,fuck it,tell her just swallow me/
duck ock,when i bust shots. cuz ima pen a trait,like 'describing facial quality'**//
i got to admit the whores weird,he's just a bored queer /
him dissin me? HA!,Ali knows he cant se himslef judgin' me like George Greer***//
aight,aight,calm down,we all know im official,run up..hit you
goin platinum?? wooow,this man couldnt 'make silver' if he produced his initals!****//

*drops mic*

* -Wade/Weight
** - Pen a trait/penitrate
*** - George Greer was a blind judge
**** - AG = his initials/the chemical symbol for silver



vote up,5 min key..thought i wasnt gon show...HA!(heavy weight)

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3124047

edit this later with the rest of my links

OMG

aii this is how I see this battle ..................Ali G ......Your hve a nice style and nice attempt but you have to up your game by skills madly and I feel the only reason I voted for you was bcuz you actually tried .....not really based on what you did so sorry But you do get my vote try and Do betta next time man

Otta Octavius

THIS IS NOT A HATE VOTE BUT.........................QUIT RIGHT NOW !!


But man onthe real you need to read some other verses thats are posted and change your whole game up bcuz if you keep postin like that well lets jus say that the left side of your rec will stay at 0

my v/ Ali g

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One Love

*Bridging The Rap*

Stanza Productions *Dem City Boys*

^word, tanks man, maybe ima do dat and take dat advice and I can be as good as you one day

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Thinks hes a pimp, how he figures the shit? kid is a dick
These bitches wouldnt blow O's with cheap cigarette tricks
Hoes quick to turn U down unless the ladies bezeerk
Cuz chicks aint doing OT like they too lazy to work
Octavius'll get hurt when I make his head jerk
And remove OC so fast it'll help the network
They don't wanna see Otto show up, son you over
They only wanna see auto show up and run you over

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Nothing

wow...this was embarrassing for Otto...He came really wak with terrible Structure and basic concepts. Then bragging because the shit took 5 minutes (which I hope it didnt take that long to write that wak verse fam) was just bad for him. Big ups for showing though but you didn't drop as good as I expected you to fam. get rid of the newbish // lines...that shit is wak brah. No hate at all.

V/ Ali G

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figure I could drop by and promote my my first mixtape and what not since im here..

Hoes quick to turn U down unless the ladies bezeerk
Cuz chicks aint doing OT like they too lazy to work
^GOOD PUNCHLINE
I speak ether, while this guy be weaker
Cuz we all know Octo puss like sea creatures
^MIGHT BE A LIL PREDICABLE VERSES HIM BUT SINCE I NEVER
SEEN EITHER ONE OF YOU, I GUESS IT’S ALRIGHT


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ya bitch wanna holla B,fuck it,tell her just swallow me/
duck ock,when i bust shots. cuz ima pen a trait,like 'describing facial quality'**//
^COULD BE WORDED SMOOTHER BUT I LIKE YUR CONCEPT


v/ Ali G

Oct aside from what words said about the (//) < Stuff at the end of your bars, don’t explain your wordplay and
Punches at the end of the verse, Either people gon’t get it or they won’t but explanions make you look like a
Newbi and is frowned apon like swaying. Continue to keeep good concepts and wordplay like you seem to have but shorten some of those bars after the set up, even them up a lil cause your followthru bars look hella streched.. N.E wayz Ali had one more quote than you did. Keep elevating fellas.

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Thinks hes a pimp, how he figures the shit? kid is a dick
These bitches wouldnt blow O's with cheap cigarette tricks
Hoes quick to turn U down unless the ladies bezeerk
Cuz chicks aint doing OT like they too lazy to work

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nothing

V/ali g with those okay at best lines..you have the idea just keep battling an you'll elavate...this was a weak one nuthin really stood out otto you had alotta played lines an structure was weak..

Uppin for votes

Man I don't even wanna break this down...

Not hating on you Otto but you got a loottt of work to accomplish.
I can't find anything worth quoting...

I gotta give it to Ali because he had some OK lines...

Vote - Ali G

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"Only god can judge me, but I'm atheist so you do the math..."

Ali G won this with a weak verse... Otto just didn't come with anything. All those explanations and crap were just off-putting and you came with no fresh concepts, good wording - or anything. I wasn't feelin Ali's verse either, but it was a lot more polished.

Vote:
Ali G