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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=238264
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=238276
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ya sporting an old style, that garbage ain't right, clown
you scared of going with the current, cause ya might drown
you're always at a loss & that's why this fake is weeping
look at his record... now it's the first time he'll be breaking even
see, i'm everything you're not and can son this hoe
i'm a fucking living legend... and, well you're none of those
drop asap? shit, any time i'll be dropping the sickest rhymes
and when these bars start Striking you'll think they're picket lines
i be treating pussies all the same, Comedian be ripping 'em
TEF always uses alotta Periods just to show the bitch in him

Uppin for votes

Damn TEF it seems like a re-occuring problem with you. Got these good concepts than you stumble on the wording and makes a potentially good punch not hit.

Ya’ll can’t convince me he’s not a faggot tryna act grown and savy
Palmin so many black balls, you’d think his bedroom were a Bowling alley

That was the only line i could quote... but the funny bone line could have been better... the comma line could have been way better too, i seen that and was like 'this should be dope'.

Comedian wasn't much better but I don't think he was aiming for a dope verse.

The break even was alright and the periods line was pretty funny.

Vote - Comedian

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"Only god can judge me, but I'm atheist so you do the math..."

This Illiterate wangsta! Education? This fella will need it
If Cops throw the book at him, He’ll be ok unless they tell’em to read it
We HATE swayers, Even the guys I lost to will ride with the feeling
That him droppin ASAP’s wishful thinking
…………………The league just hopes it’s off the side of a building

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ya sporting an old style, that garbage ain't right, clown
you scared of going with the current, cause ya might drown
drop asap? shit, any time i'll be dropping the sickest rhymes
and when these bars start Striking you'll think they're picket lines


I thought that Comedian came pretty weak in this battle. His wording was weak in most parts and really I don't think he won at all. The breaking even bar has been done before, the living legend line was weak and that fucking period line is played to fuck concept wise. TEF didn't come much better, he has some raw concepts but really needs to work on his wording and stop with the ................... all the fucking time. The dropping off a building line was nice, although the concept is a bit used it still came off good. And the illiterate line, I don't know if it is just me but I fucking laughed my ass off when I read it. I guess I'm a fan of those cheesy jokes and shit, anyway... I've got TEF taking this battle.

V/ - TEF

tef

This Illiterate wangsta! Education? This fella will need it
If Cops throw the book at him, He’ll be ok unless they tell’em to read it

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Comedian

i be treating pussies all the same, Comedian be ripping 'em
TEF always uses alotta Periods just to show the bitch in him


aight battle..comedian had ok lines here...Tef is getting better i think he has good ideas juss the wording isn't there...the comma line coulda been better but it was too forced...comedian was alittle simple tho to win this battle

vote-TEF

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Ya’ll can’t convince me he’s not a faggot tryna act grown and savy
Palmin so many black balls, you’d think his bedroom were a Bowling alley

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you're always at a loss & that's why this fake is weeping
look at his record... now it's the first time he'll be breaking even

i be treating pussies all the same, Comedian be ripping 'em
TEF always uses alotta Periods just to show the bitch in him

ehh, this was a closer battle than i thought it would be but there was really only one line from tef that made me smirk a little, (bowling alley).....and then comedian had two that were equal or better than Tef so i gotta give it to comedian.

v/comedian

tef's verse was aight. like he has potential. but it was just sooo played. the funny bone bar. throw the book bar. bowling alley bar. droppin bar. all of those were played. so yea, get fresh concepts. comedian's better. i was feelin the current bar. breakin even was funny. yea he just got it easy.

v/ comedian

Ya’ll can’t convince me he’s not a faggot tryna act grown and savy
Palmin so many black balls, you’d think his bedroom were a Bowling alley


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see, i'm everything you're not and can son this hoe
i'm a fucking living legend... and, well you're none of those



this was a close battle. really close. i'll be honest here, i think Comedian might have pulled this out. I almost voted for Tef, but some of his lines were worse than Comedians bad ones. I liked that blackball line, the throw the book one wasnt bad. But i liked some of Comedians lines a bit better.

I could see this goin either way tho, no hate vote at all. close battle.

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DOHpe.

classick . johnhensley . mets . shakezula . deon . properhops . armz . username

This Illiterate wangsta! Education? This fella will need it
If Cops throw the book at him, He’ll be ok unless they tell’em to read it

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drop asap? shit, any time i'll be dropping the sickest rhymes
and when these bars start Striking you'll think they're picket lines
i be treating pussies all the same, Comedian be ripping 'em
TEF always uses alotta Periods just to show the bitch in him

v/comedian..but by only a little bit tef you had a decent verse some lines where weakly worded but the punch i quoted was good..but you feel off in areas
com had those 2 bars that were pretty good an they were overall the best from the battle you verse had less played shit you get my vote

This Illiterate wangsta! Education? This fella will need it
If Cops throw the book at him, He’ll be ok unless they tell’em to read it


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i be treating pussies all the same, Comedian be ripping 'em
TEF always uses alotta Periods just to show the bitch in him


this is a close one, not a particually good one, but a close one. tef's opener was alright.. apart from that & the quotable i gave him i feel his was lacking. comedians opener was played.. but i feel the rest of his verse had consistently better lines than tef, tho not being quite good enough to quote. add to that that his closer was the punch of the battle & i've gotta edge it to him.

v/ comedian