aight, this my first RV track, jus so yall know i read the rules, here are my two links!

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3128514
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3128515

this is off my upcoming mixtape, "Class Dismissed", i got the hook, and 1st and 3rd verses, Been Dumb is in the middle (No Homo) on the second verse. Leave some feed and i'll RTF

here is the track link:

Different Homes Feat. Been Dumb
lo-fi URL: http://www.soundclick.com/util/getp...id=4793845&q=lo
hi-fi URL: http://www.soundclick.com/util/getp...id=4793845&q=hi

or just check out my page
http://www.soundclick.com/perpetualemnity

and feel free to listen to, and/or download any tracks!

Appreciate all feed...peace

UPPIN....for some feed

listening now

the statics kinda high in the beginning

the quality seems like it might be a little iffy

multies were good....you gotta nice laid back underground style...i think that you should add a little more emotion on that first verse......the lyrics had good substance...just a lil more emotion and change up and it would be better

hook same thing..would be better if you added more emotion

second
better emotion.......lyrics are cool......i just dont like the lispy sound on the voice here and there...but its all good.......flow was decent........this aint to shabby either just more emotion and it'd be way better

hook again more emotion and it'd be better


3rd verse seems like the dude has more emotion........lyrics again had good substance.....but with more delivery on that it'd be way sicker...good shit though.........



overall decent song..i think ya'll should re-record it and add a lil more delivery and emotion and it'd be agood album track

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appreciate the feed, and will defo return the favor, as ive got more tracks to post up still but yeh, definatley appreciate the feed!

Uppin

this track was aight for meya efforts for it are coo the hook was str8 first flows slips a bit lil offset in spots but no to bad the second verse needs more delivery ya lyrics were str8 but how they were presented just gotta throw that shit in the face of the listenerthird verse was my fav i thought it hit on all cylinders overall an average track with a few fixes a bananaz track u feel me? anywho do you homeboy shits soundin nice overall

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