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Hook: Para
First verse: para
2nd verse: Para

Yup I switched my flow up and my style, yall been sayin my flow so predictable well how bout now?

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3138712
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3138710

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Beat : this beat grabbed my attention... good beat choice....

intro hook... eh... i gotta most deff tell you that its improved 10 fold...

Verse... your style is coming off the most fluid i think ive heard you.


Production.... on that last outro hook i see you upped your game by adding some sound effects over the vocals there... you can most deff tell your uppin ya game.... now... some things to work on.... a more complicated rhyme scheme.... your still kinda locked into the cat/ hat/... mad/sad rhyme pattern.... if you keep with this elevation that should all change in the near future... This was with out question in my opinion your best work

Keep Elevatin P

RTF on my track : WAKE UP

-Don Tito Bronsky

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Full Metal Bronsky Dropin 1st Quarter 08'

you still didnt return the favor, I left feed on the savior man

decent track man


I hear u tryna sing and come creative on the hook

not bad...not great...


wasn't bad dawg




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thanks to the people who actually fed my track lol. up

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Listenin'...

Like the phone filter intro..Hook is ugly to me I hate it, sounds really off...no hate, you still got that baby rhymescheme like dat dat dat/ rat rat rat, it's too amateur but youre emotion is gettin alot better good to see you doing dubbs and adlibs...lyrics below average...Iunno what you tried with this song but I hate this hook no hate, you're confidence is alot better that was good...n flow is alot more str8..the rest keep working on...1 no hate

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....suck a dick faggot.....

thats coo man but i thought outta all people you'd like it damn. it's coo though uppin

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^ make up ya mind lol

but ye i listened to this a coupla times...to be honest i wasn't feelin the hook either it was mad choppy and super basic...also i couldn't really see how ya switched up ya flow coz it's still got that 50 type seperating ya lines type flow...lyrics were ok i guess feelin the beat...ya emotion has definitely stepped up a few notches but its still got that element of robotisism in it...

I suggest for ya next track to try connecting ya lines more...it'll improve ya flow and also it may shake that robotic type delivery too...

keep droppin RTF in the link below (in my sig)

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R.I.P OMB

To Be Honest...I Don't Know Why I Bothered

thanks uppin...

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ight...the hook is ight, didnt really like it much but it works for the most part...the first verse is decent...i didnt realy like your flow on it, its shaky in spots and im not diggin the emotion...2nd verse, again with the shaky flow and its kinda mechanical...the lyrics are there their just arent being delivered that great...the beat was pretty good but i wasnt really diggin the flow too much, it says you switched your flow so maybe its just that you're not comfortable with the new style...but you def. got potential and def. keep droppin, you can only get better and better

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