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Lay Fear has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-26-08 07:43 PM.

Take the dive, you'll get dropped as I see fit.
Cuz ur text skill is plummeting to a degree that EVEN cliff divers can't compete with.
I'm elite, quit. Why should I try, you can't compare this is practice.
Kaution?..You didn't have to warn us,...were all already aware of your whackness.
You can't survive, you won't be left alive, so noone assist him.
How can they put Kaution tape around the scene of the murder..if YOUR the victim.
Fuck this emo, noone will think of you as tough competition. I'm admittin your shit.
If anyone referrs to u as cut-throat..its cuz u must got annoyed with slittin ur wrists.
So what if were both in junior, I just figured this abusing would help.
If you EVER wrap the title around the waist..its cuz I'm to tired to do it myself.

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Kaution. has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-26-08 10:03 PM.

you got super powers dude, but Kaution's still gonna crush you
i`ll make you iron man, then after you can shine my shoes
kid fuck you, you say that im wack? well kid your wacker
get your bitch and smack her...
n once i win you'll put your head in shame like the Radio banner
your text'll be blowing your a beast kid and your ego is growing
see your in a league of your own. since VTL is wack n no one'll join
give you a kick to the groin, you'll try to avoid this battle you traidor
dude's so scared he'll try to make an escape like he was superman tailor
[[S-cape]]
go ahead and get raped, when your losing you always try to bitch n whine
but i'll beat you for good...
..cuz in this battle i'll be e-racing this kid like nascar online

-K.

Voted For: Lay Fear

nice opener, u stayed consistenta, all round...nice verse

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Voted For: Lay Fear

Take the dive, you'll get dropped as I see fit.
Cuz ur text skill is plummeting to a degree that EVEN cliff divers can't compete with.
^Pretty decent line.
I'm elite, quit. Why should I try, you can't compare this is practice.
Kaution?..You didn't have to warn us,...were all already aware of your whackness.
^Pretty good play on his name.
You can't survive, you won't be left alive, so noone assist him.
How can they put Kaution tape around the scene of the murder..if YOUR the victim.
^This wasn't as good as the other but deecnt.
Fuck this emo, noone will think of you as tough competition. I'm admittin your shit.
If anyone referrs to u as cut-throat..its cuz u must got annoyed with slittin ur wrists.
^Eh, I didn't really like this one that much.
So what if were both in junior, I just figured this abusing would help.
If you EVER wrap the title around the waist..its cuz I'm to tired to do it myself.
^That made me laugh a little.

you got super powers dude, but Kaution's still gonna crush you
i`ll make you iron man, then after you can shine my shoes
^This was a pretty good line. Probably the best of your verse.
kid fuck you, you say that im wack? well kid your wacker
get your bitch and smack her...
n once i win you'll put your head in shame like the Radio banner
^This was pretty dumb.
your text'll be blowing your a beast kid and your ego is growing
see your in a league of your own. since VTL is wack n no one'll join
^That was reaaaalllly gay. Why would you make a punchline with that rhyme style? And what makes it worse is that join rhymes with nothing in that whole thing.
give you a kick to the groin, you'll try to avoid this battle you traidor
dude's so scared he'll try to make an escape like he was superman tailor
^And I guess you tried to rhyme join with groin right there but the flow on that shit is epic fail. And as for the rest of this bar, it was alright I guess.
go ahead and get raped, when your losing you always try to bitch n whine
but i'll beat you for good...
..cuz in this battle i'll be e-racing this kid like nascar online
^Gay.

Lay Fear won. Basically because his punches were actually funny. I saw what Kaution was trying to do but all his attempts were weak or not funny. Kaution, if you make a punchline saying "Like," 90% of the time its gonna suck. You could have definetly worded them better which would make it sound not gay and have more worldplay. Herbish punchlines. No offense. Don't take it to the heart.

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Voted For: Lay Fear

one sided really. Flashs punches are a lot more solid, setups are a lot more smooth. Few smooth multis in your peice aswell, decent job.

Kaution. you have a few ok punches, setups were a bit hit and miss though. Good attempt though bro, stay elevating.

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