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| Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio  |
03-07-09, 09:14 PM
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New Jack
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IP:
Avoid strecthing your lines out and forcing a ryhme scheme.
You have good imagery, simplify wording... expand vocabulary. You CAN do both at the same time. Work on the overall flow, it will be nice to see how you approach different topics throughout the season. |
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