Uppin dont sleep

i got ur uppin hangin, lol j.c dogg, tight drop the sht was ill, i tapped into the topic right away, i studied the ninja story, the way they were pushed out of their village by the shogun and retreated to the mountains of Kai, then honed their skills and revolted, i liked this peice, ill up for ya

uppin

Due to my forced fascination of ninja's, I really got into your verse. I liked the line 'The rain beating hard I understand every last drop' cuz I'm obsessed with rain it made me think about how one would understand it....literally....still thinking. And the idea at the end (hopefully I got it right), that you find a sense of devine meaning and understanding in death, but cant use it... was cool. Props.

aight thanx for all ya praise uppin

what i meant by seeing in the end was that a life of a ninja has only brought murder and death but its only within ones own death that you understand the futility of it all. One of the emotions i tried to get across is the idea that the training has masked the ninja into not really seeing what he is doing i.e. murdering but with this his final killing he suddenly starts to see glimpses of the truth. the rain is symbolic of his emotions and the direness of his situation.

Uppin dont sleep now

uppin this dont sleep

fuck this uppin

fuck all this sleepin uppin

YO i though thiz piece wus tight flow wus 9/10....and contend wus nice.....

peace

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atlast sumone replies thanx. uppin

Fuck off. You up'd enough. Don't be gay.

fuck u fool id been uppin cos i was replyin to everyone elses shit (including yours) and none of the little fuckers would reply so fuck you.

1. Calm the fuck down.
2. I'm doing my job, don't get your panties in a bunch. If you don't like it..well tough.
3.

I'm gonna start with I usually don't like story telling, I dunno, its just not something I'm into. ...but illness is illness none the less.
The perplex imagery throughout this was just fucking amazing.
I thought the ending was good, I thought you would have made it better through describing his death more vivadly, but its all good. So basically the ending was the only part I wasn't loving 100%..but the rest...the rest I did.

thanx for the response on my rhyme
....dude your shit was ill.
for vocab was good to the point i couldnt even understand i was so lost in the big words...but that makes a rhyme sound awesome on audio
keep postin