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please comment on my key

Man, this is aiight but the layout fucken threw me out dogg, its hard to understand the rhyme patterns when u got a shit layout so next time, press enter and space it out, you got a good vocab and show skillz so just lay it out better then this'll be all good yo!

Peace Out!!!!

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yeah press enter every once in a while... easier on the eyes... not too terribly original... was cool though... did you get this idea from
blackalicious - alphabet aerobics???
keep rhymin

yea i did, i got a few of these im real good with alliteration

all i gotta say is if u dont like it u frontin cause no one could come close to me with alliteration, not even close

^^ that directed at me??

nice rhymes.. but u gota lay it out like.. example
Arsonals of ambiguos abilities amplified/
Aroedynamic antipop activists assertain annuities/
your art is assanine pre abolished abilities//
aimed at archangels and aritstocrats armchairs/
absolute action/ acted out like army artilary attachments//
nah wat i mean ? .. keep spitting though

lol, thanx but i know wha im doing but i can use the construction crit... thanx

The rhymes n shit were aight but the set up was all wrong.
Try another style, were people know where the line ends

Peace....

Peep this

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=35040

yea it was alrite still but u really need to work out on that lay-out try n do it lik

blah blah blah/
blah blah blah/

because it gets confusing otherwise.

other than that BIG IT!

^Yea, that's what I was going to say and no one is saying you don't know what you're doing they're just telling you what you need to do to make it easier to read. You have nice lyrics and content but the set up is wrong. Pushing enter will let people know where to stress a rhyme and improve the flow they're reading. But other than that you have nice lyrics and from what I could tell a decent flow. Keep elevatin...

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