Somethin i wrote in 2 min...Its kinda shitty, but its not that bad...I think its a pretty good subject...ight here it is...

Alright thugs its not time to kill its time to listen//
look ast all these homies whining and bitching//
just cuz these chumps cant get a record label//
doesnt mean u cant go out to get a real job and afford cable//
if you really wanna rap then u gotta keep tryin//
stop tryin to be queer and stop denying//
ever heard of that rapper named 2pac?//
he first went around rappin from block to block//
start out small then make ur way to the big leagues//
after that you'll be considered a real MC//
this game isnt always bout violence and machinery//
this is what us thugs call poetry//
so just take a second to listen//
dont try to act cool and always be trippin//
u need to learn what goes on in dis game//
people spit real shit, not shit thats lame//
just dont come up wit some spit thats shitty//
or else u'll end up like fuckin p-diddy//
he keep changing his name from time to time//
that bitch cant even write and rhyme//
so u choose one name and stick wit it//
then maybe you'll make it as a rap artist//
can u comprehend what i'm sayin?//
this isnt a playground, so stop playin//
this game is something real//
this is what will get you a record deal//
once u get an offer dont disregard//
cuz once u turn one down, homie u wont get fuckin far//
just take yo time, yo still a youngin//
its a big game, but dont get discouraged, and dont go runnin//
dont worry bout yo glock//
like i said, just start off like 2pac//
take is slow and go from block to block//
take ur chance now cuz u only get one//
dont waste yo time, cmon go rap, son//


replies please

not to bad for 2 min. it seemed a bit choppy but it was ok. it was a good topic too. keep spittin.

also could you peep my shit?http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=39624

Need a better flow to it it was there in places but not many.. OoNnEe