This is sorta based on da sme topic of 2pac's ''me against da world'' , but i'm doin my own version of da shit...hope ya'll like my remix.........

(...sits down at desk, wipes the tears of his face.....and takes out a pen and piece of paper.....)


God this is my fight...... Its just me against the world
neva been loved right , neva had my own gurl
gettin punched in da face, by da fists of reality
buildin my own family, 14 and makin my own salary
my future is buildin up ta nuthin, i aint gotz no presintation
memories of my dad walkin, leavin abolutly no hesitation
leavin nuthin but a ''fuck you'', my body achinof desperation
had my back against the wind, i was neva goin turn around
seemed lik afta i climbed a mountain, i fell back 2 da ground
then afta i got up, sumbody came,& had 2 knock me back down
i had so much anga, trapped deep inside me u'd find my rage
lik i was a hevenly angel....and i was trapped inside hells cage
i was readin da story of my lif, then it came i couldnt turn da page
i neva wanted fightin,only wanted 2 speak 2 peoples hearts
but seein so much tramma from these eyes, started fallin apart
had 2 get a lif, had 2 mak it sumwhere, had 2 shoppin at K-mart
didnt tell no 1, but i needed my father more then anything
visions of me and him, damn he took away so many dreams
cryin my eyes out, spillin all my guts , my heart and my soul
i was headed fo nothin had an altermotive for no goal
lik i was diggin through the mountains, but neva looked 4 gold
sleepin on da couch at night shiverin, no blankets my life is cold
its like i jus got a massage, but yo my body's fuckin sore
like im fightin in dis war, but theres nothin im fightin for
my life is nothin close 2 a paintin, much less a fuckin mural
God this is my fight.......its just me against da world.........

....hopin fo' sum feedback.......on a scale from 1-10 what do ya'll give this shit......

*sings* " only god can judge me now" lol nice peice soldier.. you have some real good talent though you know I know this. You should do what I'm doing. Lets try a comedy... we'd be real good at comedies lol... well I'm a goofy person but yea I give it a 9 nice work

....thank u.....uppin ya'll

Good beginning, needs work, but I liked it nonetheless, insert 2pac's chorus, and tell more about him, or about other people, then... Go audio

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...thx bro...yea it does need work...i just wrote it right now so im a really work on it, expect to hear more from this....thx yall...still uppin

I feel you on this topic man, well explained. Its a more emotional piece but still a good break away from the Battle text.....

y0o soldier thats was tite, only thing was I got lost at the end, you came of tite in the begining
Favorite Line:

::gettin punched in da face, by da fists of reality:: 7/10

"gettin punched in da face, by da fists of reality
buildin my own family, 14 and makin my own salary"

thats a sad story, yo u really go thru all a these situations,
yo fuck havin complex vocab that shit was deep no matter who says what, i really felt ya on that one,
yo u shuld just use spell check aiit n a lil grammer culd have been improved

this piece made me hard

^^^^^ im dont really kno wat that meant...but thx ya'll and everyone dat posted i'll be sure 2 check out ur next posts aight....still uppin...peace..and God bless

Soldier cheak out my shyt like i said ur was tite( mine are Crazy and True Rapper those are the names cheak it)

Soilder riped this shit up again ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, 4 sho fam , ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

it meant it made me dick grow an xtra few inches