Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio |
05-06-03, 12:14 AM | #1 | ||||||
Guest
|
Me against the world.........(remix)
IP: ABE5 5A5C
This is sorta based on da sme topic of 2pac's ''me against da world'' , but i'm doin my own version of da shit...hope ya'll like my remix.........
(...sits down at desk, wipes the tears of his face.....and takes out a pen and piece of paper.....) God this is my fight...... Its just me against the world neva been loved right , neva had my own gurl gettin punched in da face, by da fists of reality buildin my own family, 14 and makin my own salary my future is buildin up ta nuthin, i aint gotz no presintation memories of my dad walkin, leavin abolutly no hesitation leavin nuthin but a ''fuck you'', my body achinof desperation had my back against the wind, i was neva goin turn around seemed lik afta i climbed a mountain, i fell back 2 da ground then afta i got up, sumbody came,& had 2 knock me back down i had so much anga, trapped deep inside me u'd find my rage lik i was a hevenly angel....and i was trapped inside hells cage i was readin da story of my lif, then it came i couldnt turn da page i neva wanted fightin,only wanted 2 speak 2 peoples hearts but seein so much tramma from these eyes, started fallin apart had 2 get a lif, had 2 mak it sumwhere, had 2 shoppin at K-mart didnt tell no 1, but i needed my father more then anything visions of me and him, damn he took away so many dreams cryin my eyes out, spillin all my guts , my heart and my soul i was headed fo nothin had an altermotive for no goal lik i was diggin through the mountains, but neva looked 4 gold sleepin on da couch at night shiverin, no blankets my life is cold its like i jus got a massage, but yo my body's fuckin sore like im fightin in dis war, but theres nothin im fightin for my life is nothin close 2 a paintin, much less a fuckin mural God this is my fight.......its just me against da world......... |
||||||
05-06-03, 12:15 AM | #2 | ||||||
Guest
|
IP: CEF5 716F
....hopin fo' sum feedback.......on a scale from 1-10 what do ya'll give this shit......
|
||||||
05-06-03, 12:20 AM | #3 | ||||||
Guest
|
IP: E2EE 59B6
*sings* " only god can judge me now" lol nice peice soldier.. you have some real good talent though you know I know this. You should do what I'm doing. Lets try a comedy... we'd be real good at comedies lol... well I'm a goofy person but yea I give it a 9 nice work
|
||||||
05-06-03, 12:25 AM | #4 | ||||||
Guest
|
IP: CEF5 716F
....thank u.....uppin ya'll
|
||||||
05-06-03, 12:28 AM | #5 | |||||||
Jee-You Knit?
|
IP: F75A 411A
Good beginning, needs work, but I liked it nonetheless, insert 2pac's chorus, and tell more about him, or about other people, then... Go audio
__________________
<table style=filter:GLOW(color=black)>MadMan</table>
-An Original RB Member: Yes, We're That Much Better- Throw Back .Compton Records. .Vicious Determination. "There are times when silence has the loudest voice" - Mike Bibby The First Ever Middle Weight Champion |
|||||||
05-06-03, 12:32 AM | #6 | ||||||
Guest
|
IP: CEF5 716F
...thx bro...yea it does need work...i just wrote it right now so im a really work on it, expect to hear more from this....thx yall...still uppin
|
||||||
05-06-03, 06:48 AM | #7 | ||||||
Guest
|
IP: C67E B098
I feel you on this topic man, well explained. Its a more emotional piece but still a good break away from the Battle text.....
|
||||||
05-06-03, 07:33 AM | #8 | |||||||
BANNED
|
IP: EE66 657E
y0o soldier thats was tite, only thing was I got lost at the end, you came of tite in the begining
Favorite Line: ::gettin punched in da face, by da fists of reality:: 7/10 |
|||||||
05-06-03, 10:37 AM | #9 | ||||||
Guest
|
IP: 1501 77A0
"gettin punched in da face, by da fists of reality
buildin my own family, 14 and makin my own salary" thats a sad story, yo u really go thru all a these situations, yo fuck havin complex vocab that shit was deep no matter who says what, i really felt ya on that one, yo u shuld just use spell check aiit n a lil grammer culd have been improved |
||||||
05-06-03, 04:37 PM | #10 | |||||||
BANNED For Being An Idiot
|
IP: C22E FA17
this piece made me hard
|
|||||||
05-06-03, 07:27 PM | #11 | |||||||
Guest
|
IP: CEF5 716F
Quote:
^^^^^ im dont really kno wat that meant...but thx ya'll and everyone dat posted i'll be sure 2 check out ur next posts aight....still uppin...peace..and God bless |
|||||||
05-06-03, 07:36 PM | #12 | |||||||
BANNED
|
IP: EE66 657E
Soldier cheak out my shyt like i said ur was tite( mine are Crazy and True Rapper those are the names cheak it)
|
|||||||
05-06-03, 11:08 PM | #13 | |||||||
BANNED for biting
|
IP: FF98 53B8
Soilder riped this shit up again ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, 4 sho fam , ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
|
|||||||
05-07-03, 11:33 AM | #14 | ||||||||
BANNED For Being An Idiot
|
IP: C22E FA17
Quote:
it meant it made me dick grow an xtra few inches |
||||||||
05-07-03, 07:23 PM | #15 | |||||||
Guest
|
IP: CEF5 716F
Quote:
...aight dats fuckin sick...why wuld a song make u hard...i dont kno..but thx , still uppin yall |
|||||||
Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
Display Modes | |
|
|