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04-30-03, 04:20 PM | #1 | |||
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[6] fgee vs [8] Dirtboy69
IP: E3CE 67F4
Check In By.... Friday
Post By.... Sunday Vote By....Tuesday Topic Suicide in your sleep
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04-30-03, 04:29 PM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
cheque in........win out,,,,,,,,,,
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04-30-03, 11:13 PM | #3 | |||||||
i changed my title !!
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IP: CE07 81DB
checkin in
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win loss record 18-19 with 7 k.o's and sign up for the battle league would yeah, also show up if your already in the league |
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05-03-03, 06:54 PM | #4 | |||||||
i changed my title !!
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IP: CE07 81DB
a long party i'm too tired, i fall into a sleep too deep/
psycotic thoughts and vivid nightmares of suicide in my sleep/ ironic thought, " that would be some what of a feat/ after all that i've beat and then sent off to retreat/ the simple thought frightens me lost because of self defeat/ past events and gaintic woes now i face my biggest foe/ wake up or is it a dream a dark room where do i go/ a right turn past the door and i think i hear a scream/ what a burn my girl with some one else this must be a dream/ i run into the room and start throwing punches at this guy/ he ducks pulls a knife and then lunging it deep into my thigh/ i back off in agony and yell "i'll kill you before i ever die!!"/ my vision's blurring and the pain is causing me a headache/ i don't know if it's real but he's dead even if this is fake/ i turn and face him again this time it's the barrel of a gun/ i try and move and/or duck but at this range it takes only one/ the cops show up later that night at my house and see me/ they say it was suicide there was no one here it was just me/ did i pull the trigger on my self during this last time i slept?/ or was the dream so real that the bullet that i caught, i kept/ i was in a rush and i don't know the no show rate in this legue is high so i'll win anyway
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05-03-03, 10:12 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
Suicide in my sleep;
collapsing on my bed the world of dread runs through my head/ thoughts weigh heavy like lead an exhausted mind empty of living but full of dead.......mental scars ripped open as tears turn red, draining the strength from my body as wounds are bled the world seems so cruel and offers no respite, every path appearing blocked might as well give up the fight/ days of innocence left behind i only see the night, clouds loom overhead blocking out rays of light, and dissapearing just as i catch sight the back ground music fades into meaningless speech, similar to my existence thoughts skip to the beats, wandering astray negative overcomes positive inflicting defeats, wishing i could exchange this body for better and throw away the receipt misery compounded by rejection in music, when they ripped up the contract i turned to alcohol and abused it, money drank away and rehab couldnt make me quit, turning to extreme ways to relieve the pain life became illegit, now it's suicide i want to commit in a state of sickness i reach for my pills, down the gullet it fills a gap and spills into my blood stream hidden emotions it conceals gradually time slows down and the room appears sureal, entering this ordeal which will return in the morning a monster revealed pupils dilate one last time before sleep, finally i can escape reality and relax from consciousness in one leap, head slumps into the sheets head becomes sweaty dripping beads, internally my heart is blocked no longer bleeds, killing me softly resulting from my addictive needs 18 years of life sacrificed all in the feeble hope of a happier afterlife, as blood congeals in the veins my remains turn white eyes closed......they found my body decomposed accidental suicide from an over dose Newspaper Column; After 2 weeks the corpse of a local man were found Now the remains are buried at the cemetery burial ground Apparently the unknown male living on his own OD'd on pills Police say his body was unrecognisable and are studying photo stills It is assumed he mistook the drugs for his medication *But u and i know he purposely swallowed his final destination* |
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05-05-03, 07:56 AM | #6 | |||||||
i changed my title !!
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IP: 7D77 8113
both verses are up. so let's get some votes
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win loss record 18-19 with 7 k.o's and sign up for the battle league would yeah, also show up if your already in the league |
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05-05-03, 06:14 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
some votes in here?
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05-06-03, 09:55 AM | #8 | |||||||
Got More Meds Than Pfizer
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IP: 5041 F8F4
I'm givin' this to fgee.. damn yo, you ripped it.. way more complexity, and it flowed better from the first line to the last..
"misery compounded by rejection in music, when they ripped up the contract i turned to alcohol and abused it,"... I liked that line... DirtBoy, dawg, your shit hardly flowed, the vocab and wordplay were minimal at best... your best line was: "i back off in agony and yell "i'll kill you before i ever die!!"/ my vision's blurring and the pain is causing me a headache/ i don't know if it's real but he's dead even if this is fake/"... it's a couple lines, but the best of the whole verse.. you need to elevate alot more.. it kinda sucks that they stuck you with fgee, 'cause he's got mad skills anyway.. lol.. luck of the draw I guess.. peace
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05-07-03, 02:09 PM | #9 | |||||||
i changed my title !!
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IP: 71E0 21F0
next week's battles are suppose to go up today and this battle's got no votes!!!! come on now
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win loss record 18-19 with 7 k.o's and sign up for the battle league would yeah, also show up if your already in the league |
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05-07-03, 07:07 PM | #10 | ||||||
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IP: E2EE 59B6
This was very hard to choose from being that both were very touching stories.. and also can happen in real life. Those are the best type of poems that are out there.
For overall vocabualry: Fgee Best Insight: Fgee Best Story overall: Dirty Boy Metaphors: Fgee Following the subject : Dirty Boy, Fgee you didn't take the suicide in your sleep subject.. you mainly had suicide but my vote goes to Fgee.. he had alot more to his than Dirty Boy did |
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05-07-03, 07:10 PM | #11 | ||||||
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
it was suicide in my sleep cos he took the pills and killed himself while sleeping....but thanks for the vote
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05-08-03, 08:00 PM | #12 | ||||||
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IP: 5153 3B92
damn, talk aboutsleeping
This wasn't a very good battle... fgee mainly just murdered Dirtyboy. fgee had pretty much everything Dirtboy had and then everything he didn't... Vote- fgee pz |
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05-11-03, 01:59 PM | #13 | |||||||
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IP: 1C7B 976F
I give that round to dirtboy, wanna know why?
i turn and face him again this time it's the barrel of a gun/ i try and move and/or duck but at this range it takes only one/ the cops show up later that night at my house and see me/ they say it was suicide there was no one here it was just me/ did i pull the trigger on my self during this last time i slept?/ or was the dream so real that the bullet that i caught, i kept/ Thats some real deep shit dawg, my vote goes to Dirtboy |
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05-12-03, 06:50 PM | #14 | |||||||
i changed my title !!
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IP: CE07 81DB
so ah when are battles over??? any guesses
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win loss record 18-19 with 7 k.o's and sign up for the battle league would yeah, also show up if your already in the league |
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05-12-03, 07:06 PM | #15 | |||
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IP: B58B 8A3A
Fgee wins....
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