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06-18-03, 04:25 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Haven't written down my thoughts in a minute - i will return with some hard punches ... in the meantime between time i'll be hitten ya'll hard wit comments...aiight...
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06-18-03, 04:34 PM | #2 | ||||||
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eyo
:::....::: mic check one - two ... makin sure this shiznit is on..... from time to time you have been on my mind with your majestic legs to your timeless breasts i breath your desire such a desire that blows my strength into an eternity of discretion that is hard to surpass into my many everlasting comfessions of my undoubtful love for you with both time and chance i am transformed from one that discloses to one that transposes any type of affection i feel your wind i feel your spirit i feel your mind my heart beats to your silent drum breathe out - so i can breathe you in - although you don't know who i am i will forever know YOU from time to time you have been on my mind with your majestic legs to your timeless breasts i breath your desire my love for you always for years to come ___uppn for some comments...I know i can do better but i just had to get some type of literature out there...its been a minute___ Last edited by SmoothCrmnl : 06-20-03 at 09:24 PM. |
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06-18-03, 09:20 PM | #3 | ||||||
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uppn for comments
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06-18-03, 10:10 PM | #4 | ||||||
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yo man...wtf was that ish....lol
good stuff man... keep that raw ish coming |
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06-18-03, 11:11 PM | #5 | |||||||
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RAW Nice....and confusing 3 words..lol that makes a perfect poem
Nice drop peep mine http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=58416
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06-20-03, 12:12 AM | #6 | ||||||
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thanx ya'll uppn for mo comments
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06-20-03, 12:44 AM | #7 | |||||||
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"timeless breasts" okay preacher....keep gettin the literature out
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06-20-03, 12:49 AM | #8 | ||||||
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hahaha i know i know...holla
uppn yall |
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06-20-03, 02:11 AM | #9 | |||||||
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haha nice...
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06-20-03, 07:23 AM | #10 | |||||||
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nice and the lines that really stood out to me and kept me reading was " breathe out - so i can breathe you in -
althought you don't know who i am i will forever know YOU" check ya later
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06-20-03, 09:25 PM | #11 | ||||||
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haha thanx ya'll...keep uppn kidz
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06-23-03, 01:33 AM | #12 | |||||||
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ill rhyme, discloses transposes, didn't even though those words existed... the breathe out breath in thing was good, keep it up. peace
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06-23-03, 03:05 AM | #13 | |||||||
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pretty interesting....the vocabs are really good..teh flow was a bit off but could work on it....
"my heart beats to your silent drum breathe out - so i can breathe you in - " like they said..the whole breathing thing..is defnitely out there nice work! ahhhhh i feel like i can relate cuz the past few days ive been feeling that shit...and its crazy...ahhh but yeah...i liked it but couldve been better...drop more!
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06-23-03, 02:41 PM | #14 | ||||||
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holl ya'll...thanx for da comments
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06-23-03, 02:47 PM | #15 | ||||||
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damn dawg....
very very well written...i liked how u wrote it...it got ur ideas through better and it allowed the readers time to pause and think about wut u just wrote... that was very deep sonny....very ill..keep droppin that knowledge on us man... be-eazy go check out "the utopia of our love" if ya got a quick minute.... |
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