thanx. See thrillz, I could careless whachu say cause u a hata. I shake dem niggaz off and let them beat they dick while sayin shit on a screen but not to my face. So as long as tha hataz stay doin dat shit, I'll be cool. Just dont come around me doin dat shit or u catchin a fast one.

This piece was straight, u need to raise ur vocab, complex ur style and work on ur punchez, i see some potential, if u work at it you'll get betta, and u really need to loose that "gangsta" attitude....its aight to use it sometimes, but not 2 much, by the way hit my piece wit a rating out of 10...1

I give ur piece a 6 outta 10. It was complexed and shit y'know. So keep ya game up and thanx for tha advice. I guess more anger management needed...

vocab was weak, if u plan on doing more text up i a bit more, wordplay was aight but lacked complexity rhymes were sumtime weak sumtimes average, subject amtter needs more originality, i aint hating tho
jus try n elevate dawg, keep writing and your time ll come

Eborted verdict-E

hey good shyt, but u could use some more wordplay... h ell we all coud use better wordplay but its still pretty good for a newbie