Ight this is a 5 min ryhme, still tryen to elivarte, my second frestyle

lool............

I see some girls and guys that look like alien invaders/oops,my fault,more like alien planets wit all them craders/its so grose,red dots wit white puss/there face is pretty much screaming plz "wipe us"/dirty as baby diapers/i can admit,i used ta have achne/but i see sum kids rocken pimples like a cuff in there kacki's/its so disgusting,leaves me with a sour taste/u can play connect the dots with there face/u look at em, and there facial features pop/they serve faces liek theres at pizza shops/face fizzen up like coca cola or pepsi products/i seen less foam on coffee's from starbucks/hey, i wouldnt say i wouldnt puond there hymen/im just sayen kissin a girl wit pimples is like mountan climbin/its like a teenagers version of chickin poxs-see/this girl i knowhas got em, her name is roxy/she needs ta go ta her local pharmicee and buy some oxy/i hate pimples,and i dont mean ta be mean/but i seen kids scratch there face and it began ta bleed/how fucked up is that, man how can they live,k im gonna stop it/i dont wanna jinx my self with this rude ass topic/
If u got a pimple, POP IT!/ chicks wit pimples r affriad to take they tops off cuz they backs filled wit litttle red spots, disgusting just the thought/ dont matter if the bitch is hot, its like their face turned rotten/ sumthin i dont wana see when im fucken/ damn bitch buy sum cream, go shoppen/ every mornin, if u a bitch check if u got a zit b4 setppin outside yo door n start whorin/ now look wut you've done, gone and poped it durin dinner now u pourin/ wit blood frum your open poors, enough to make a person slip n fall on the floor/ fuckin whore/ u need to find yoself a bag cuz it looks like yo face is on its

yo you got nice wordplay and a lot of meta's but you should think about working on your flow try and stay on a consistent sound i'm not hating you're good but elevate it is dope funny content but again the words don't move there is a lot of stop and start in your words make it move like water. Look i don't have the strongest punches i don't use a lot of meta's or multi's but i make the words fluid. keep writing though it wasn't bad

aight well do u wana battle

are u allowed to be in 2 battles at once?

SICK thats all i gotta say SICK

Still uppin feedback ppl frum TOP emcees

out of all concepts, out of all the concepts

nice drop dumb name

Dumb topic.......
making fun of acne is old..... there are some forms of it that have to be treated with prescription, and regular over-the-counter drugs will not affect it at all. You act as though it is easy to get rid of.

Flow was off, message was stupid. You're complaining about acne and it's scars, but yet you tell them to pop it. Popping pimples is what creates scars, idiot.

^^So says Pistol Pete........


Dumb topic.......
making fun of acne is old..... there are some forms of it that have to be treated with prescription, and regular over-the-counter drugs will not affect it at all. You act as though it is easy to get rid of.

Flow was off, message was stupid. You're complaining about acne and it's scars, but yet you tell them to pop it. Popping pimples is what creates scars, idiot.

Hasha are u guys serious, what is this a health toipc now u fuckin losers, its just a freestyle u fuckin idiots lets see u do that in 5 minutes bitch, fuckur selfves


IU NEED FEEDBACk

and what do u mean by dumb name

see thats a fuckin newb here for u ^ what are the chances he did that in 5 minutes wen its took like 5 to read dumass newb

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ok bitch then mabe 6-7 minutes u fuck

And if that took u 5 minutes to read your a fuckin retard

u stupid fuck haha, 5 minutes to read that little paragraph? Dumb shit what the fuck are u Illiterate? U were probably tryin to sound shit out the whole time, peace

^ stop lying, you know you took more than a few minutes to write that.. but more importantly.. WHO THE FUCK WRITES POEMS ABOUT PIMPLES?!?

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Aight the, I'll start writin about more serious things