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Old 08-30-03, 08:20 AM   #16
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yo this was deep, this was the kinda poetry you had to use your mind on ya know what I mean? Just some deep shit,... great flows and vocab combined with emotions and a deeper message hidden within.
That's the way it's gotta be.
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Old 08-30-03, 03:31 PM   #17
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^Thanks a mil man thanks to all for your replies, elevation is key, 1luv.
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Old 08-30-03, 11:11 PM   #18
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Abstract and cryptic.

Letting rip your problems past/present. In a way which brings self satisfaction if nothing else.

Because you reveal little in a blatant way with this piece. Yet the way you wrote it brings forth the power. To understand that power, one will have to dig (which'll take a long time). I most definetly appreciate this 'style'. I too most of the time write hiding the personal meanings. Gah!...

Anyway, i got parts of it. Mostly probably aren't your own meanings. But what i got out of them. Once again, that's the versatility (albeit to many akward and too complex) of this 'style'. Which you actually write like a lot. Though not as heavily as this (in my opinion).

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Old 08-30-03, 11:31 PM   #19
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This was a hot poem you started off good and came dope through the whole piece nice job here are the lines i liked the most off ya verse..

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fuck my last bar the cold chrome is heaven the trigger is dipped in the reverse~
i read verse-es and as i cross the desert of truth i stop treading and plead thirst~
that was merely mediocre hold a poker facer as im swarmin the block~
my holster tastes of souls taken without a warnin i drop~
pain has struck again in the form of my fallen wife~
my heart slows its beat as i retreat rather then stand tall in strife~
FUCK MY LAST BAR rage grips my mental strings and plays a gangsta tune~
a melody of tombstones and bones of heaven's ghetto but no slang to use~
u know the drill my mic meditation is mettled in mediocrity~
toppin me and being you leaves u etched in hypocrisy~
but as a sidenote my pain did i mention my love, beat without a heart?~
love lost and as my seems seperate my life just comes apart~
but simplicty strikes my dome no longer am i in fear of us being estranged~
i see the reflection of ecstatic rage as i peer into the window of pain~

Tight...

Keep it coming..
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Old 08-31-03, 12:20 AM   #20
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^Thanks always V and thanks Ra both replies was on point keep em comin ya'll im lovin the, 1luv.
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