At poignant times in our lives
Extreme hate can reign upon body and soul
Adrenaline pumped and anger combined
To become a drug,
Powerfully addictive-
I am this epitome
I savor the taste of human flesh
Of dead bodies rotting in the ground
I hate in the most civilized of manners
At a level of unequaled professionalism
I may sound cold hearted and arrogant-
Because I am
I am everybody
I am nobody
I am beyond criticism
I am not ashamed to look in the mirror
And see my reflection
Because I know who I am-
I am forever.

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I'm a bit wary aobut this, since ya got all mine right I wanna try and understand yours so here goes............
I think this is a searching, someone who didn't understand themselves, didn't see themselves and hadn't come to the realisation of what they could be, who they are...
This was that realisation, that truth, setting aside all the meandering thoughts and flouncing ideas and agreed with who you are...looked at yourself and said 'This is me'.
This explains the human flesh, admitting you enjoy things which others may consider shameful, uncivilized, yet you perform them in a civilized manner, which has some relevance to the idea of modern capitalist governments fighting sick wars through hidden ways...You may also be justifying this bloodthirsty need for a right cause.

This explains the arrogance too, it's not a bad arrogance, just a defence mechanism, you've seen who you are so you must stand proud to avoid crestfallen ideas popping into your head again......
But theirs something else, i dunno if you put it there or not, i couldn't see it...you're arrogance is so sudden, you're admittance so quick, it catches one off balance, making me think you're hiding something, an emotion, a hateful one, a hateful event or idea that you despised but were truly intrigued by that you're hiding, hence the sudden confession to dark loves, seeminly searching for an approval, or even repentance, but i think you thought about repentance and said "This is me, why should I repent myself?"

This creates swelled pride, and then self-belief at the end and in short, as I never am, you have thought, searched, agreed and stood up...
It was also to enthralling to ask questions or look for technical faults, it was all good, unique rhyme scheme, I thought it was good in that sense, and a poem which leaves only space for thought about it's meaning is truly an enthralling poem......

Did I get it?

Wow, thiers not to much else I can say about that. It sounded great.

Wow this one was deep... I felt it man. Deep shit... not just some words put together to make it rhyme or something, just deep. Nice piece.
Keep droppin

peace

THanks for the comments, appreciated

'Did I get it' - Deceit, I think you gave me new understanding of what I was thinking when I wrote this..It is about arrogance and hatred and being in touch with that dark side where you do think about shameful things, what it would be like to do them. You are right on repentance, I dont seek repentance as what is done is done. When I was this person I was too angry to seek it, and now Id rather learn from it than punish myself further.
You were also right in the fact that there is something missing that you couldnt see. There were a final few lines that were originally on the piece that I have since removed. Ive changed, Im no longer the hate filled person I was when this was written, so they are no longer needed. I will include them here, and you will see what it is I wanted..

Finally, a diabolical thank you
Goes out to myself-
For as long as you hate
I know I am on the right track.

Yeah, you got it

Kudos~

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Good Piece!

U really made it spill emotion>

Imagery was good.vocab was strong.Structure seemed a bit streatched.No Hate!

I bet that ur not tha only one that feels like this!

Nothing stood out but nuthin was missin'!

Overall good drop!

~kEeP~uPpIn~1lUv~

~Eternal~

I liked this peice alot; i showed incredible defiance of a traditional format and how that poetry isnt limited to structure

Poetry is LIMITLESS

Boundaries were made to be broken and this peice did just that. keep droppin and youll only get better

~~elev~~
pz DF

this was tight..made me jealous..i cant do nothin with poetry...good drop...

I felt this peice in my own way. Very much the way you explained it, but still different.

Amazingly enough, I think this is the only poem that ever inspired me to do animations. Heh...

This is the image I got in my head when reading your peice.

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

Thanks for the feedback

Love the image Necro, I see it.. Thats how I felt, a blur ..
I wanted hatred to reign supreme on everyone, as it did me.

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You know something, i dug this piece in quite a personal way. Not so much with the arrogance part (though it does play a part). But the overall 'i am past it all and i can deliver my vengence in many forms of varying degree'...well along those lines. I can't really put it in so much words. But yeah, i dunno if that's your meaning.

But yeah, a feeling of supreme anger and hate which is kept boiling within...at the ready to unleash unto others. Like you've been taken to the edge. And yet you're such a calm, peaceful person usually...

Well, approached in a dextrous and original way. Pulled of to good effect.

..resp..