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I tremble beneath the cold, lifeless touch of the rain as I walk towards the garden
My mind set upon the future I have created for my own well being
My hair matted against my face, only serves to distract me from this ill-gotten destiny
Mindlessly trudging through the mud, eyes fixed upon that subtle patch of white
The garden entwined with beautiful roses, red pulsing through every petal
Each rose is more handsome then the last and they are all comforting to me
Finally my struggle ends as I come upon the beautiful grace of that single white rose
So clean and majestic, the white rose remains untainted by this harsh reality
These liquid emotions swelling up inside of me, thicker then the blood that flows through my dying heart
Soon the rain finds itself jaded by salty tears, just as I have found my soul corrupted by this disturbed life
Silently my new found lover approaches me as that majestic white rose looks on
It is my razor that shall become my new found friend and allow me to free my broken soul from my body
Slowly caressing my tense nerves, easing my troubled mind, calming my tears and half-hearted aggressions
The razor dances along my skin which is as white as that single white majestic rose
Kissing me deeply, engulfed within a fierce and forceful passion, aiding me in my silent struggle
Blood drips slowly from my lips as I lust for more of the razors endless touch
Tears resume to fall down upon that majestic white rose as it looks upon me with its virgin self
Now that tragedy has struck my soul leaving me with a simple and faithful image
Those beautiful white petals now tainted by my blood, stripping it of its purity
The dripping blood paints a path that I dare not take back towards my horrific past
My tears fall upon the rose, streaking its crimson stained petals and rolling off
The once comforting breeze now chills me to the core and the no longer majestic rose shutters beneath its caress
A simple now red petal falls away from its sanctuary as it starts its own long journey to its end
Swaying back and forth as it gently glides to the ground, I watch in a silenced daze
And as that simple, single petal falls to rest upon the gruesome soil I am overcome with sorrow
Not a sorrow for what I’ve done nor those I’ve hurt nor a sorrow for the pain that I’ve caused myself
But a sorrow for that once pure, single white rose and the tragedy that I’ve forced upon it

~Hope Ya Like~
~I dont write often but when i do i put my heart into it so plz leave good feed~
~I wrote this about a pic i made that i attached~

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up plz

n e one????

iight

you gotta wait a little while for some replys k, and reply to other ones to, then ppl will reply to yours

about the piece, it really did show that when you do write something you put alot into it. it was a good piece

sometimes i did lose myself in the flow, it turned out to be more of just a slow read spoken thing, cause the lines were so long.

but you had so much emotion in it so much effort and so much truth, although this is getting to be a topic thats written about, it was still a good read, and you represtented it in a way i havent seen done before, comparing it with the white rose and all

the line that stood out to me was:

Kissing me deeply, engulfed within a fierce and forceful passion, aiding me in my silent struggle

my love

~Tera~
DONT HATE

BTW thats such a strong picture i looked at it in thought for like 5 minutes

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wow thnx lol and yes this is one of the longest pieces ive writen

Badass picture, extremely badass drop. I can see how the picture influenced you, I thought the imagery of the one white rose was CRAZY good. The text color made it all the more powerfull, very good drop. return the favor plz

peace

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no doubt thnx