Made you look like crooks with bags of jewels
like ludacris my rhymes leave you shook, actin a fool
my rhymes have rules i don't accept wackness
have skills to avoid your sorry ass on my blacklist
since way back when i've been droppin-bombs
lyrically attractive i have itchin-palms
so the big pay day as they say should not-be-long
jus the same-old-song, that might one day
get radio play, have a rap classic like dre day
keep your distance, cus i'm blessed, with a sickness
keep ya hands off me cus you'll be, blistered in an instant
from my scripture, collide and wished that you'd missed it
skipped it, you left flat on your back is what i intended
sorry-for-my ac-tions that will leave sores-on-your-eyes
you're-in-surprise you back-flip and hit the floor-in-demise
hide-your-eyes you don't wanna be watching my-fights
try-to-rise from ya coffin if you step when it's fight-night
shining-like-lights-bright you're denying i'm hot
timing-like-short-nights laying by death you'll rot
if lessons work then i'll teach you'll be taugh
i'm new around here but can-ya-tell?
i'll fuck you up worse then the power of 'isabel'//

tight drop needed a lil something but was ill peep my new peace
will you ever understand........
this was good your style is agressive i think if you elivate a lil you would be twice as nice

thanx for checkin this man, i'll go peep yours...

uppin

uppin

i think the lack of a topic killed it for me
the vocab was there, mulits were lacking...
flow was so-so... im not saying its that bad, just i felt you could have dropped much better

nothing stood out of it that made me take a 2nd look...

if you would be so kind... or hell give me hate feedback... i just want feedback
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81183

haha it's all good man, some feel it some don't, no worries, i'll return the favor...i'm jus trying to get better. Thanx for the feedback.

no no no.
i stopped reading
after you mentioned
ludacris. bro. write
something that actually
means something. no
more of this bling blang
bullshit. it's shitty.

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