Keyed As An Audio Jus Want Feedback Coz I Am Gonna Do A Hook If It's Record Worthy.But I Feel It Isn't Jus Want Some Confirmation.

Internet Emcee

At one with tha computer i sit and type for hours/
times passed without return from the higher powers/
unsigned,resigned to creatin topics originally thought/
new and inventive but no signature or cd's bought/
people are blind i must remind them to open there eyes/
everyday an internet emcee dies but noone cries/
bein unknown and alone at your computer isn't fun/
i feel like the invicible man and i'm on the run/
from tha majority of emcee's who have no topic/
gather them and put them into a nuclear rocket/
set the ignition alight and blast them to the moon/
no remixes left or gravitational dick ridin bafoons/
only room for tha master race of hip hop elite/
emcees who rhyme with passion and never retreat/
we call these few and chosen ones internet emcees/
like you and me we rhyme for the music not tha fees/

I look for ways in which i can describe what it's like/
being a strugglin emcee who knows he's one with tha mic/
but noone wants to hear tha truth comin from my lips/
they wanna see videos with chips and chromed out whips/
thats ok though i'll continue to live life then express/
emotions and reality which i know can sometimes depress/
tha majority of people who only want to listen to beats/
coz without producers some emcees wouldn't be spittin heat/
with lyrics so hollow and unmagical compared to my own/
but as an internet emcee your forever cursed to be alone/
caught up in the world wide web like the spiders prey/
nowhere to go internet emcees are destined this way/
too remain like a creature who lurks in the depths/
waitin for that oppurtunuity to flow live to the decks/
and show that they knew they had that skill all along/
it's just about gettin tha chance and expressin it in song/

hell played out topic, the hilight of this was probably the flow,
decent content, i 2nd verse was way better then the first,
well its a bit simple if u ask me, and i wasnt really feeling th topic,
but if u wanna go ahead and record this, then i suggest u make
some quick corrections to the first verse, in like 1 or 2 lines the
flow was off, other then that i dunno this was nothing extra-
ordinary.......................................... ..........................................

i actually like it the topic may have been done but it is played on the net not done yet on the outside,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
it was simple in verse but still a real good peace i think with minormodifications this could be a nice audio.

For having been this topic i thought it was a nice piece, the vocab was okay, wordplay was aite, the flow overall was good, but i could tell in the end that it lost somthing... started getting weaker.. but still i enjoyed the piece not too complex and not too simple it was a good read, keep dropn and Elevate! one love.

Lol always funny to see kats sayin elevate,anyway yea i'm feelin what you kats are sayin, yea it was simply written,had simple vocab and was nuthin special,it was a key and not like tha usual stuff i drop but as i thought it's not worthwhile recording so thanx for tha feed.

Peace

i think it could be a good drop for audio just touch it up this topic hasnt been recorded on beat to fire off

nah dawg i'll let it be,got other shit that can be done in tha meantime,i was feelin tha same as you guys just wanted to make sure,feel me.

Peace

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Fuck you

Funny how peeps always drop feed on tha topics which are weak and when good shit is bein dropped mutha fuckas are ignorent to it.

Meaning this was tha weakest peice i've done and it get's alot of views early,and the good shit always get's slept on,life is funny aint it.