as plain as the sky when the stars don't shine
blackness is infinite but color is limitless tonight
spin with the time, morality is morally mortal
so it does die, short from kombat portals
quarrels in carpools have us swimming in blood
until we sink to depths undefined to try out love
I tried out love, . . . and i got cut
but since when is coupling a team sport? it's some
way confusing, interluding my kindest passions
when can i find this maddness to contrast sadness
lavished and brandished so bandages don't cover
wounds that are underneath the skin, we can't win
we won't win. we are all going to lose. so theres
really no use trying. so for now i'll just loath my
inner obsession with dying. goodbye . .. . .

pretty deep but r u writing hip-hop or poetry lets keep it a little bit more gully-on the lyricall dose your rating is a 6

i agree it was quite poetic, but thought it was pretty decent, wasn't really feeling the flow cos the structure seemed a bit eratic, but the content was good, but i would lose the faces...lol...peace...........keep droppin....

can you hit this plz......
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=88249

you should lose your own face.
and blaze 1 you suck. and since
when is poetry art stuff not gully?
freakin' homos. =I

lol ^ "freakin homos"....this was a pretty good piece i thought...flow was alright i thought, it wasnt bad....your structured was alright as well, could be a bit better but still good though...Your vocab was good as well...the content was good, stayed on topic i thought...overall it was a alright piece..keep at it...and keep dropping.

i can beat father flow topically.

i thought that it was hot to, feeling is important to me when writing. Good shit. keep it up. Rear some of my stuff, and let me know what you think!! Thanks

no i'm fine thank you.

its was aight

YO THIS IS HOT NIGGA, ITS DEEP, FUCK WHAT THEY SAY ABOUT IT NOT BEIN GULLY THIS IS TIGHT, KEEP DOIN UR THING.
PEACE

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