RNC
KMFOB
KING OF THIEVES


HOOK:
THE DAY I FALL OFF.....IM SHOW THE WORLD THE PROOF-
AND SKY DIVE WITH A WARHEAD AND NO PARACHUTE.
FROM THE GRAVE AND BEYOND I'LL drop the bomb and
deliver THE TRUTH.SO WHEN I DIE I want my
21 GUN ALUTE AIMING AT YOU.

VERSE 1
when the bell rings-you leaving in a hospitol sling-
spit 60 punchlines..in a minute you'll feel the swing-
of things.
firing shots lyrically for the street and the bing-
cause on the block the glock is what physically sings.
the drama i bring.. is MERCILOUS...SYNONMYOUS with MING.
leaven your splean "fucked" like a one night fling.
m.c.'s will be left deceased when the words are released-
my contents obeice-handle my beaf..
to satisfy my appetite-while my rhymes gain the selulite-
i stay married to DRAMA like i was KAY SLAYS' wife.
keep my lines sharper then seringes-
go through bars like drinking binges-
leaven m.c.s' rhymes and spine desaligned like door hinges.
go to war with metaphors-
stay ahead of time....
battling myself with the same verse i record
the night before.
do you have that level of dedication?
there's no room for your invasion of the game without renevation.
i take the uncivilized and commercialized-
then divide-the wise from you uselss guys-
when will you realize?
your raps would be crap if they materialized.
front like you can proficize and speak poet-
then be crucufied while i piss in your moet.
you aint me and you know it.
NONCENTZ utilize my kinetic-to tear through the prostetic-
on instrumental-
find my semon ginetics-in the dna of you pathetic-
gineric wannab's with no potential.
see for me reigning (raining) is an essential-
flowing caroding and eroding is sequencial.
my body is 21 but my minds and hyms are quincentenial-
usen how flawless my lines are as credentials.
to prove compared to me your greates m.c. is only aight.
kill you in 1st person cause in 3rd i wouldnt earn braggen rights.
the day i fall off wont happen-
call this the narcaleptics anthem-
for everyone that been nappen-
i aint new to this i been rappen.
i been battling except no my verbs do the scrappen-
words can hurt you-but mines will burn through-


HOOK:
THE DAY I FALL OFF.....IM SHOW THE WORLD THE PROOF-
AND SKY DIVE WITH A WARHEAD AND NO PARACHUTE.
FROM THE GRAVE AND BEYOND I'LL drop the bomb and
deliver THE TRUTH.SO WHEN I DIE I want my
21 GUN ALUTE AIMING AT YOU.

This piece was aight....just seems like the usual battle type verses I've seen on the open mics...

You vocab was good...except you don't now how ta spell obese(obiece) or cellulite(selulite)...at least look em up real quick...an I know when ya on a mic it dont matter...but when ya stickin um on a website for cats to read...it kinds fucks flow up to figure out what word you was really meaning....feel me?

Other than that shit...ya flow was good...Bring some more deep pieces...I feel that you can bring more heat....

Overall....I liked reading the piece....just check them words b4 ya be puttin em down

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"Knowledge is intelligence. Intelligence is power. Mind is music, but music is forever." - Trip Marxx

<font color="red"><font face="comic sans"><center>An you thought I was wack?</center></font>

<h2><font color="blue"><center>-- Merkin You One Line At A Time --</font></center></h>


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damn its not a spellin b--i understood it..once again you did it again-more lyracle warfare-i wanna peep you in a battle, that shit was tight.

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let's get this shit straight, i'm here to eliminate- them squadz wit feminine traits, there's no escape!

uppin yeah i do alot of battle but there are also deep songs ive done

creative, good flow and punchlines, over average wordplay good drop man..peace

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

uppin and thnks

lol anyone

littered with dope lines as usual
i'd like to see you tackle a topical though...dont think i've seen any of your material other than this type
not really much to say though..usual dopeness i expect from your drops
loved the begining and the hook was a good touch
like i said plenty good stuff in there...
props my man

ur rhymes was pretty simple in the begining....one syllable rhymes are pretty weak for a track like this....and it seemed like u were really trying to do a 50 Cent style track.....the farther u got into the track the more u seemed like u was gettin into it so I kinda gotta give u props....but in the end nothing stood out that great and overall it was basically a subpar battle kinda thing..

also word of advice.....what's the point of having a hook if u only have 1 verse?

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nice drop as usual son...i thought that hook was fire...flow was good, so was the vocab, wordplay and punches...overall i thought it was a pretty hot drop...liked the kay slay line...keep dropping nice shit....

o yea if you get a chance, peep my latest open mic...i'm always looking for feedback...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=89818