Responded to; BrokenWings, DaGyrlRemarqabL, and Calisto!

((I wrote this awhile ago.. it's like.. my life summed up into a poem. Its long, I know... but yeah..))

Beated, Hated, Discriminated
Three words that sum up my life, I'm irritated
People don't know shit about me, but yet they judge
They bitch and wonder why I've got no fucking trust,
Sit back, relax, and listen to this tragic story,
I'm sorry if you can't handle the story when it gets gory,
But this is my life, the way it goes, and wasnt easy,
When I was real young, everyone used to tease me,
The first guy I trusted fucked me over and beat me,
When I was just seven he scarred my little mind forever,
No ones done anything worse to me since then, never,
He violated me, entered me, and hurt me with physical pain,
I dont know why he did this, raping a little girl, theres nothing there to gain,
That little bitch fucked me up so bad, now I'll never again be the same,
At Nine years old my favorite person in this world died,
I can't remember any other time I've sat and fucking cried,
I tried to crawl into his casket with him, go to heaven with his soul,
They told me I couldn't do it, and now I'll never again be whole,
I remember shaking and crying...screaming violently beyond control,
When I finally stopped, I had to make my mind up what kind of person to be,
Was I gunna be one that respected all man kind and treated everyone humanely?
Oh hell no, People hurt me and I was sick of getting hurt,
I was gunna treat them like they treated me, they were about to feel like dirt,
So up until I was 13 I never let a guy get to me, and never cared,
I'd been hurt too many times, I'll admit it.. for once I was scared,
I let one guy into my heart, and he promised me he'd never fuck me over,
But he lied, I was wrong to trust him, he ended up to be a cheater,
He fucked two girls while he was with me, It was because I didnt give him what he needed,
My self esteem, my self worth.. every ounce of dignity was depleated,
Then more than a year later, someone penetrated my heart with his eyes,
I fucked up when I dated him, I shoulda known he was the devil in disguise,
He did drugs, he was a thug, but he made me feel like a queen,
For months the two of us were together, our love was serene,
But I didnt know he was cheating on me with more girls than I can count on two hands,
Everyone told me just to get over him, he wasnt worth it, but still no one understands,
I felt like it was my fault, I let myself fall in love twice only to get fucked over twice,
The one thing I've learned now for sure, is to never let a guy into your life, it will be your demise,
Guys always lie, and girls eye's cant realize these lies, but all we've gotta do is look at the signs,
Trust me, take a little time.. it'll end up worthwhile, so a guy doesn't leave your life in the shits this time.
Dont ever wonder why I'm as untrusting and unloving as I am today,
You fucked me up, fucked me over, that's why I am this way.

^ even tho I don't agree with the things about all guys being liars (cuz personally I feel like all girls are liars sometimes) I felt this whole piece....I've read this before but I still feel this shit...u got some anger in this but it's also sad enough to almost make me cry (I didn't cry tho cuz I'm not a pussy..lmao j/k)...been a while since I read ur poems and now I remember why I used to like em....niceness

peace

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you got me grabbin my nuts to make sure they still there, lol damn that was like harsh, but fucked up that some guys can change a females view point on all men.

*sighs and pats everyone in this thread on the head*

Ah, a new generation of rb.com poets. May you, my great grandchildren grow in love and trust of one another like the generation before you.

Anyway... enough of the old timer sprechin'. Your poem. Ok, I tell you this. I liked it. I really really liked it. I mean, it was raw, free versed, and unfettered. It's the kind of peice that takes a while before it'll ever be cooked well done. Of course some people like their poetry medium rare, and this one certainly hits the spots.

I suppose I should elaborate. This peice reminds me... of well... a peice I once did a long long time ago. I mean, I can't say in terms of subject matter that the peice I did was anything like yours. But in essence it was. I wrote a poem about my life too and it was raw and unfettered. I guess I'm sensing a lot of potential in you. As if I'd be taking you under my broken wing or something.

Anyway... a direct comment towards the subject matter... men. I can honestly tell you, as a man myself, we're just not worth it. Become a lesbian, because men will just continue to hurt you.

And if you do become a lesbian, send me pictures. Please?

~Irenic~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

wow baby... this piece just sucked me right in
I'm sorry to hear that guys have treated you like that, and as a man... I feel like I owe ya an apology
anywayz, bout the piece
I felt it... just some honest shit, straight from the heart. It was raw but it was real. Seriously, some nice shit ova there,...
don't ever let someone take ya down, I hope ya find something meaningful in ya life very soon
resp

Thanks for all the feedback. I posted this poem first because it gives you insight into my life that most of my family doesn't even know.. and when you read a lot of my other poems you're going to realize where they're coming from. Why they are the way they are.. why I am the way I am. I appreciate all the nice comments about this poem because it comes straight from my heart. Thanks.

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It seems like you and I are one in the same. I've gone through all that you have, and I can tell you this with all of my heart, you are so right. I was cheated on, and I almost killed him with my bare hands, but his brother stopped me. I decided a while ago not to let guys in my life anymore, but I cant do that from some special ppl. Even tho they are guys I kno they wont hurt me. Yet maybe that is a disguise too, pretty much the moral of all guys. Overall I absolutely loved this. I know where you are coming from because I've lived it. Its really hard these days, but ya get thro em. Great job gurl. Keep it up. Most respect!

Wow, just plain wow. I haven't read anything here for about two months, then I come back and this is the first thing I read. It was almost too much. I might have go on another break after this. Very raw, emotional piece. I definetly feel this

peace

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