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11-08-03, 09:56 PM | #1 | ||||||
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A lone Rose
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Walking down a dark street in the middle of the night
A lone rose growing in a crack in the ground, breaking free, growing a world from a single seed Love is the only things it needs It roots go deep and at night they creep And in the darkness of the night it feeds This is a lonely decree A last stand of a dying rose A rose that only god knows A rose from which beauty flows The rose has thorns but purely for protection Its soul has died; it’s a living resurrection Look close you can see inner mans reflection Full of hate lies and deception The rose grows fast thriving on street aggression Inside its beauty is a world of lessons Its blood red and its image sticks in your head And you can’t describe it with words that can’t be said And you can try to write it but the words they can’t be read Cause it’s a one rose in a concrete habitat A dying soul in a lonely hole And so I stop to admire the dying rose And out my eye a single tear flows Cause I have seen beauty that no one knows |
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11-09-03, 04:01 PM | #2 | |||||||
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twissted peice, tha rose was a man right?got some pictures created in ma mind wit this but it could b a bit clearer. could of used different vocab on tha first 6 lines wen u were tlkin bout darkness and night [e.g after dark, when the sun is down] u get me? cant realli pick out fave lines, like these lines...
"A rose from which beauty flows The rose has thorns but purely for protection Its soul has died; it’s a living resurrection Look close you can see inner mans reflection Full of hate lies and deception"keep it up Dr.Gonzo peace ~roX~
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11-09-03, 05:19 PM | #3 | |||||||
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^^lol.....i thought the rose was a rose.....but it was a tight peice..the simple admiration of a rose growin thru concrete is rarely seen...so i give u points juss fa seein it...whether u saw it or not...but all in all a nice drop the flow could be more structure and the rhyme pattern dropped in an out but those are flaws i kno all about ...points galore...stay up -shi-
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...do tell... Every lil boi is born shi......their ignorance makes them bold...... simply put"...wise words whisperd to deaf ears as no one hears the blurred proverbs that're always spoken clear so i fuckin swear that my where wont be here as time tolls..." second verse of 'Elevate' written by -shi- |
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