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10-11-03, 08:05 PM
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Dark August
IP: 440A E5C3
..a man comes home to find his wife fucking another man.. in pure adrenalin anger he throws the guy off his wife and grabs a knife an stabs him repeatidly.. he shoves the body in the corner and ties his wife up on a chair and with a knife in one hand and a heart on his sleeve.. an angel and devil are conceived on his shoulders.. to tell him what is the 'right' thing to do in this situation...
so.. Heres the story about a mans last attempt at life thought he had the world but the world took his wife now he has a decision which will bring out good an evil a dark August afternoon changen the lifes of three people [The Devil] So here I am the negative side youv been yearning your whole insanity as it stands is silently burning now what your beauty in the sky is fucking somebody else well whats left of this human killing him always helps so grab this bitches scars and make them wounds for feed make her slice her own skin so you can watch her bleed have her sorrow and her malice run down your back watch her frown in enjoyment as you so skillfully attack extract and dismantle her shallow soul’s worthless purpose read your deepest thoughts as she begins to be hopelessly nervous spill your whole being in your vocals tell her what she missed let your laranyx scream nightmare as you clench your fists your tounge conducts violens in every sentence you speak your robert frost’s dead corpse making her wanna be unique now watch her cry and see if she really made the right choice and watch her die and strangle her misguided backstabbing voice your choice has been made you kill her then you knock yourself and come join the unholy where we bathe in all negative wealth you cant escape the horror that has ocurced a murder of memories and your life was so promising or so you wanted it to be but you’re a disaster now.. a man who morbidally kills the weak so fuck it man.. Face it you have turned into me.. [The Angel] Yo Kid I was Observing the tension when you were Serving redemption He took your wife, you shook your knife and took his life, im yearning to mention I’m a holy been resembling dreams of assembling teams remembering scenes Of murder and mayhem cause I heard ya just slay him and in heaven we seen The rage in your eyes the cage where she lies, the rope burns and grazes There’s a stage in your life where you lay in the night your body churns and rages But now isn’t the time to express all your feelings depressed at your dealings Look at that knife I know her chest is appealing but it’s her breath you’d be stealing You used to love her, and hug her made for each other and it’s a fact that Her lover just dug her a grave when he tapped that but blood won’t bring that act back You used to walk in your own world and not let anyone digress your steps When you saw her your eyes met and wept; now you want to dissect her neck You said you loved her I know you meant it, she wasn’t screaming when you told her This is heavy let Stephen take the boulder pay no mind to that Demon on your shoulder With the devil he’s conducting a deal son I know your Erupting with fear son Cause when he whispers those thoughts into your ear he’s corrupting your eardrum You know you are above this to hurt her he is turning you love into murder I know you struggle but heard her, she still loves you thug, and she deserves you She has prayed since the night that it happened to fight back the actions Ive answered her plight of retraction that I would try to bring sight to her captain So take what ive given and give her back her taken away statement of living Break the tradition of vengeance and make a decision to stay with the women ..the two images are burned from his shoulders and the man has now got the choice on what maybe the darkest seconds in his life.. he then falls to his knees and starts to talk... [The Man] to be honest..i came here unexpected and suspected the unexpected im not going to let it..its going to be hectic if i could go back and stop it i'll trade it for my life our love was thrown away when this man penatrated my wife i just killed this fucker threw a boulder leading to a concussion i try not to look over my head with each shoulder with an option one shoulder keeping from sinning the other one encouraging i duno which fuck to trust which is the one with the truth to bring don't know what to do..already killed the other dude..confused feeled used abused but at the same time somewhat amused stood up proud.but they couldn't help but to crash the tower planted this relationship from a seed..now someone stepped on this flower the soil is dirty..she knows how to hurt me especially tonight in my sight one of these fuckers on my shoulder could be right this way she'll know her curiousty to hurt me will hurt her as we play i break the mold of this clay and will live with guilt everyday but she pulled my heart out of a hat with her black magic her tactics...she tried to talk to me but the tape made it static every love life ends tragic as i made my decision in this mission bruised lips still some lipstick left with my pain left be kissing to be honest all i wanted her to be honest thats it no stress im ready to finalize my exsitance in disgust by her to harvest fuck the angel i want her to taste what she just had to waste the most beautiful part was..last image of life was my blood racing her tears down her face an so.. 3 life's changed, two murders but only one sufferer he loved her, not her ways he had enough of her one opinion sent from hells depth one from above but it seems he craved her blood more than her love [under his breath] your my world.. i love you girl |
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10-11-03, 10:55 PM
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IP: 2486 8AB6
nice drop i was definetely feelin this shit very deep... good vocab good wordplay and good flow i look forward to readin more. yo return the favour check out http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84957
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10-11-03, 10:59 PM
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IP: 5AE9 0D41
nice nice, that shit is tight, keep'em comin
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10-11-03, 11:05 PM
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Watch And Learn
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IP: 90A3 A30F
lol..your ass should be banned for that one line feedback
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10-11-03, 11:36 PM
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Watch And Learn
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IP: 90A3 A30F
...upupupupupupupupupuupupupupupuupupupupuppupupup u...in
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10-12-03, 10:55 AM
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Watch And Learn
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IP: FA4C 51FB
uppin for more feedback...
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10-12-03, 11:10 AM
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IP: 19AF 50C1
yo son you had the elements in this and you trojected them in a very accurate creative fashion.the signs of great m.c.
we may not be fam but i will give you props still (no haten) this shit was on point like the periods. |
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10-12-03, 03:51 PM
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IP: 0A2C 5C77
thanx man...uppin
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10-12-03, 04:27 PM
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Watch And Learn
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IP: 0A2C 5C77
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10-12-03, 04:58 PM
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Banned for being stupid
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IP: 95C5 EAD6
wow homie that was a tight ass drop, ur vocab and wordplay was hella dope, ur flow was constantly there, ur content and topic were both hella original, overalll i was definetely feelin that drop holmes, keep droppin, cause that shit was amazin.
peace........ |
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11-09-03, 11:15 PM
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Just Plain Dope.
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IP: 4577 CD9A
This Sucked.......And If U Ever Post In One Of Our Forums Again For Any Reason, I Will Report It To A Mod And U Will Be Humorously Humiliated.....Ha Ha....Nah Forreal, Read The Rules Before U Post In Our Forum.
Jackass! DoPeYz. Oh....U Want Feedback?? Let's See... Where Is Your Multi Usage? Your Rhyme Scheme Lacks A Tremendous Amount. Imagery? Yeah....That's Always Good To Add In A Story. Do You Even Know What That Is? Complexity? Yeah....So Uh. Use It...Please. Structure? Ummmm.....Halfway Decent. And Um......Wordplay?? Yeah.....I Don't Think You Have That Much Talent Yet Bud. So Uh........Reroute Your Whole Writing System. I LOVE Beef! DoPeYz. |
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