Ppl wonder why I don’t like to sleep. Now hopefully, they will have somewhat of a clue as to why I don’t like to. This is something that means a great deal to me, it may be a little long, but pleeze dont sleep on it. I would appreciate feedback on this. Thank you for all of your support.


Dreamz of fear and terror...
Death and pain...
A myth or real life?...
Will it happen?...
This is my dream...

An ordinary party occurs with all of my friends...
Happiness and laughter...
I shift my eyez and bikers appear...
Driveby……

Everyone dives for the ground...
But im too late...
Everyone is fine….but me...
I get hit in the stomach and hit the ground...

The pain intensifies...
My insides are on fire...
I want to scream, but I cant...

I’m able to see and hear fine...
I move my head and see everyone get up...
I follow and get up...

Holding my stomach covered in my own blood...
I stumble towards my baby and look into his eyes...
I look at my stomach as he does...

Remove my hands and stare at the blood...
Everyone stares at me wondering how I am alive...
All of a sudden the pain increases...
I walk a little and fall into the arms of my baby...
He picks me up and carries me into the house onto the wooden floor...
Such a cold wooden floor and a firey insides...
He looks into my eyes as I struggle to breathe...

“Stay with me honey, you’ll be alright...
I’m here, please don’t leave me...
You will be fine...
Baby look at me, honey please stay...
Angela I love you please stay with me...
I cant live my life without you”...

The eyes of an angel, my baby...
Staring into those, my body feels so warm...
I whisper the words that mean so much to me and him...
I love you...
I pass out after that and just remember him carrying me down the hall...

Did I pass out?...
Or did I die?...
Will this happen?...
Or is it just a dream?...
I guess only time will tell...

You really want support? I'd check out this website here.

http://www.erowid.org/spirit/dreaming/dreaming.shtml

Especially check out the very bottom of the page, and go through the links regarding Lucid Dreaming. I don't know how much you'll get out of it, but Lucid Dreaming is an amazing thing. So much so that it can give you power over your dreams. And especially put an end to the really bad ones, like nightmares.

As for your peice... I must say I loved it. There was just something about it that made the whole thing seem... like a dream. Something about it that made it despite the seeming erratic structure, to me at least, it flowed perfectly and smoothly.

It's just the actual dream you described... I can't say I can relate. My worst nightmare I ever had was climbing in a lighthouse that was inside shop class. (It might not seem like much, but the feeling of sickness was simply horrifying. And no, I'm actually not joking.)

I don't know what it is about this peice, but I for one was certainly feeling. This is something worth hanging on to.

~Irenic~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

Thanks Necro. My dreamz arent like this every night, only when shit gets really bad. I wont be sleeping tonight, but that is for another reason. This is the anniversary of my baby boi passing away. 3 months to the day. I miss him a lot, and todays gonna be extremely hard. Thank you for the feedback on this. It is greatly appreciated, especially from you. Much luv.

iam feeling the piece. everything flowed well and i like how you really describe what you were feeling. keep it up.....

Amazing emotion flows through every word of this piece. The vocabulary you used depicted everything it seemed you wanted to get pictured. I love this.. one of your best. Great piece.

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Another great poem. This one as i could tell had plent of emotion. I liked the whole idea of it. That's waht poetry is all about letting ureself out of your cage and expressing ure thoughts and inner feelings. Great work.

Overall Grade:

9/10

Thanks all for the feedback. Idk how I do it, but it seems like i just write from my heart and theres a shitload of emotion that always comes along with it. Thank you for the feed once again. Keep em comin

^uppin for more feed.

his words stay in my head till this day and always will be. This had raw emotion in it and i know all so i understand it. You are great with emotion. keep dropping baby. Spect and love JT

i lvoe dreams! i dream like every night and everyone i can never exsplain, i try n describe them but it dont work coz i can only picture them. nice piece good story tellin coz i kno telling ur dreams is hard to describe coz theyre so weird. good emotion keep it up girl n kepp dreamin. r.i.p to ur baby
peace~roX~

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im capable of anything my amagination can give me wings, like doves flyin over streets watching many things//Nas

JT, thanks baby, couldnt get through it without you.

Roxy, thanks for the feed. I guess my dreams are complex and easy to describe cause its like they are burned into my brain. Thanks for the feed.

Keep it comin.

I can really identify with you on most of this.. I have similar things happen like that in my dreams.. and then i have thos Deja Vu tye dreams....but stay up ( i mean go to sleep lol) but stay observing that and askin others about things that similarly happen to u...they can understand u... good poem !

Great piece Angel. I have dreams like that to, so you are not alone babe. Lots of emotion and feeling in this piece. Sorry to cut this short, I will get back to you on it. But before I go, great piece.

MM

Thanks for the feedback you two, it is much appreciated. This poem, in its weird little way, means a great deal to me and hearing that im not the only one that has went through it is comforting. Thanks again. I'll ttyl Mopar. Much luv and respect.